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The Wallflower
She hoped someone would notice her
perhaps a stranger passing by
she knew she wasnt as pretty as all the rest
she hoped someone would see
all the colours she could bring...
...but no one ever came.
She wished someone would speak to her
the words that lovers use
a line or two perhaps would make her bloom
or just a single word
on which her hopes could cling...
...but no one ever did
She ached for love inside
and lost herself in dreams
of others who were just as lost as she
she invented different lovers
who would come to her at night
and drown amongst the perfume of her skin
and when she disappeared
her passing went unnoticed
she might just as well have never been
and all she left behind
where petals blowing in the wind...
...and no one noticed...still.
perhaps a stranger passing by
she knew she wasnt as pretty as all the rest
she hoped someone would see
all the colours she could bring...
...but no one ever came.
She wished someone would speak to her
the words that lovers use
a line or two perhaps would make her bloom
or just a single word
on which her hopes could cling...
...but no one ever did
She ached for love inside
and lost herself in dreams
of others who were just as lost as she
she invented different lovers
who would come to her at night
and drown amongst the perfume of her skin
and when she disappeared
her passing went unnoticed
she might just as well have never been
and all she left behind
where petals blowing in the wind...
...and no one noticed...still.
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The Wallflower
6th Oct 2011 4:14pm
I like this piece a lot. It stands out from many of the others, in a way that it silently draws you in upon reading, only for the last line to hit you right between the eyes.
I would have been proud to have written this poem myself. Not to long, not too short.. very thought provoking, and a wonderful title to seal the deal.
Well done.
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re: The Wallflower
6th Oct 2011 4:59pm
thank you Alexander,i only just changed the title,i knew what i was driving at but couldnt bring it to mind. a learners mistake,probably through rushing.I take all comments seriously wether good or bad otherwise i dont think i,ll improve,thank you once again for taking the time
It resonates
7th Oct 2011 12:57pm
This poem resonates in me, because it is familiar...the person could have been me...I love it...
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re: It resonates
9th Oct 2011 5:11pm
thank you grace for your kind comments,i must admit though that if anyone should read your wonderful poetry there is no way on this earth they could possibly think of you as a wallflower
re: re: It resonates
9th Oct 2011 11:42pm
Dear Arran, they take from someone but do not notice the source, my dear, they rob but do not know the victim...thats me.
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re: re: re: It resonates
10th Oct 2011 10:17am
dear Grace,this remark was meant as a compliment,if ive offended you in any way please accept my sincere apologies
re: re: re: re: It resonates
10th Oct 2011 11:48am
Oh no..no offence taken at all...just telling you that I was a wallflower within, wanted by everyone outside...in lusts...dear Arran.
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Wallflower...
7th Mar 2012 00:54am
It's like when we pass something beautiful and take no notice but you've watched it for weeks as it wilts and dies with no one seeing. Thank you for watching this flower.
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8th Mar 2012 8:29pm
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5th Feb 2013 8:56pm
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6th Feb 2013 5:16pm
Re: The Wallflower
I'm wondering if the first word, second to last line should be were rather than where?
I thought the poem was quite lovely...sad and wistful, but well emoted and touching.
I thought the poem was quite lovely...sad and wistful, but well emoted and touching.
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Re: The Wallflower
22nd Feb 2013 5:12pm
your quite right it should good job you turned up lola thanks for reading peace and love