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when i was five years old,
my parents taught me the importance of daily nutrients.
my innocent self doesn't knew that i was very lenient.
when i was 10 years old
my friends taught me that grades are the basis of intelligence.
i didn't know that i am already acting with prudence.
when i was 15 years old
my classmates taught me that relationship is a must
not knowing that its equal to breaking someone's trust.
when i was 20 years old
strangers taught me that life is a bitch.
now i see myself standing with own flaw and doesn't give a care whether I'm poor or rich!
my parents taught me the importance of daily nutrients.
my innocent self doesn't knew that i was very lenient.
when i was 10 years old
my friends taught me that grades are the basis of intelligence.
i didn't know that i am already acting with prudence.
when i was 15 years old
my classmates taught me that relationship is a must
not knowing that its equal to breaking someone's trust.
when i was 20 years old
strangers taught me that life is a bitch.
now i see myself standing with own flaw and doesn't give a care whether I'm poor or rich!
Published 31st Jan 2018
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30th Jan 2019 3:33am
Hi Bashilona!
I really enjoyed your poem and the life lessons that you went through to become the person you are today. I think you did a wonderful job with the story.
There were a few grammar mistakes, so I did you a favor and proofread it and corrected it for you. I think this will help readers to enjoy your poetry more!
"When I was five years old,
my parents taught me the importance of daily nutrients.
My innocent self didn't know that I was very lenient.
When I was 10 years old,
my friends taught me that grades are the basis of intelligence.
I didn't know that I was already acting with prudence.
When I was 15 years old,
my classmates taught me that relationships are a must,
Not knowing that its equal to breaking someone's trust.
When I was 20 years old,
strangers taught me that life is a bitch.
Now, I see myself standing with own flaw, not caring whether I'm poor or rich!"
Like that.
Anyway, have a great day, and thanks for sharing!
I really enjoyed your poem and the life lessons that you went through to become the person you are today. I think you did a wonderful job with the story.
There were a few grammar mistakes, so I did you a favor and proofread it and corrected it for you. I think this will help readers to enjoy your poetry more!
"When I was five years old,
my parents taught me the importance of daily nutrients.
My innocent self didn't know that I was very lenient.
When I was 10 years old,
my friends taught me that grades are the basis of intelligence.
I didn't know that I was already acting with prudence.
When I was 15 years old,
my classmates taught me that relationships are a must,
Not knowing that its equal to breaking someone's trust.
When I was 20 years old,
strangers taught me that life is a bitch.
Now, I see myself standing with own flaw, not caring whether I'm poor or rich!"
Like that.
Anyway, have a great day, and thanks for sharing!
