The Unfortunate Cave Diver

Very clever. I would suggest a few more illustrations.

Thank you for the feedback. I agree about pictures. If a book is forthcoming I can illustrate, my mother is an artist and so are a number of my children. So we shall see!

By illustrations, I mean more examples of the life being lost that the reader could visuallize.

Ah, but of course. That is a good idea. You actually answered a question of mine - whether follow up poems along the same lines would draw interest. Question answered!  Thank you! This is why I participate here. To know what others want me to write. You made my day!

I'm sorry. I thought this was a site to share and suggest edits. I really wasn't trying to offend. If you read anything i write and have a suggestion or a few suggestions i would appreciate it.

I was totally serious! No sarcasm. In fact, your request actually caused me to write another poem! It's been a while since I did that, so it felt really good to get back into it.

It will be out tomorrow but I lol tell you it's name. "Granite Widower" and I think - I hope - you will like it too. 🙂

I'll keep an eye out for it

Cool. I look forward to reading your poetry, too. 😁

I could make the poem itself longer, but I think I prefer in this case to put out a follow-up. I hope you don't take my reaction the wrong way. I just like to keep my poem stories short if possible.