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Now Then
Now
If I could
I would pulse over planets
To visit Mars
I would zoom into your heart
Just to see what's in it
I would write volumes about you
Being the one and only
I would create a species
To stop you from being lonely
Exhilarating as you are
One step from being afar
Distant from my desire
To see you again
And be with you
As history repeats
Our immortal sin
I will love you forever
From when time begins
Then
If I could
I would pulse over planets
To visit Mars
I would zoom into your heart
Just to see what's in it
I would write volumes about you
Being the one and only
I would create a species
To stop you from being lonely
Exhilarating as you are
One step from being afar
Distant from my desire
To see you again
And be with you
As history repeats
Our immortal sin
I will love you forever
From when time begins
Then
Published 14th Jan 2018
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Anonymous
14th Jan 2018 12:58pm
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14th Jan 2018 2:38pm
Thanks again ghost. As I say in my profile, I am not a poet, the messages I convey seem to express themselves. Appreciate the nod and will by checking your stuff again soon.
Anonymous
14th Jan 2018 2:51pm
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17th Jan 2018 00:20am
I've tried to not respond to this because so many comments are self serving. But you said something Hooks by the look of things. Deep and hidden yet you understand. So please explain it to me as I haven't a clue. Thank you my ghost friend, as I fade away, you have gifted me. No worries, I'm not going anywhere until 2023.
Okay, cut....
Okay, cut....
Anonymous
17th Jan 2018 1:52am
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Anonymous
14th Jan 2018 12:59pm
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14th Jan 2018 7:22pm
dearest David so beautiful a love poem
my heart skipped a beat reading its tenderness..
love Brenda
my heart skipped a beat reading its tenderness..
love Brenda
14th Jan 2018 9:33pm
14th Jan 2018 9:36pm
"I would create a species
To stop you from being lonely"
oh so loving a writer
& a gorgeous one at that..
that a you should feel this way about someone
makes me feel warm & happy..
beautiful ink..
love Raven
To stop you from being lonely"
oh so loving a writer
& a gorgeous one at that..
that a you should feel this way about someone
makes me feel warm & happy..
beautiful ink..
love Raven
14th Jan 2018 11:18pm
So pleased to make you feel warm and happy, Raven. That your response was physiological as well as visceral suggests that you are a person of deep love. I am moved by your comment as it makes me feel warm and happy.
love Dai
love Dai
15th Jan 2018 6:37am
I love it when someone asks me if I believe in love...I always say no...but I can certainly feel it as it warms my soul. Damn powerful poem David...each line lifts one up high.
Shalom...Harry
Shalom...Harry
18th Jan 2018 10:10pm
That's a great poem! Would you consider submitting a sci-fi poem to my contest? I thought this is pretty good, but if you have a more sci-fi one, feel free to use it... just an invitation for some competition fun.
18th Jan 2018 11:29pm
My competition is here in the competition section labeled "sci-fi competition" or something.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10080/
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10080/
19th Jan 2018 00:33am
19th Jan 2018 1:23am
I edited in a link in the above comment I previously made. See if it helps.
