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Internal Enemy
Internal Enemy
Standing in front of a freshly dug grave,
my soul feels shackled as for I am a slave
too the waves crashing down all around me.
I want to go on a killing spree.
Unleash the demons burning in my heart.
I guess picking up a pen is a better start.
A fire burns above me up in the hemisphere.
A fiend smiles at me since I’m the progenitor.
I’m destined to become a victim of the war.
I will go down leaving behind a trail of gore.
My words are as explicit as the darkness consuming my soul.
Grab my hand, let’s go for a stroll.
Tonight, your life will end with mine.
Say one last prayer as I finish this rhyme.
I’m running as fast as I can, my thoughts are a blur.
Where I am going, I do not know, so I must incur.
The sky is black and my surroundings are gray.
I’m completely lost, can’t seem to find my way.
I see a person in front of me; I’m closing in on him.
Bullets fly near my head; my world is currently dim.
I read the person and knock him to the ground.
I turn him over, it’s my dark side laughing, “I will always be around.”
My legacy revolves around who I was back in the day,
when I was quiet and meek, begging to come out and play.
Who I was back then has been dead for ten years.
Now I feast on your fears as I sip away on beer.
I struggle with my dark desires of fucking all the time.
Who wouldn’t? I’m a beast in my sexual prime!
I struggle to control myself and contain my emotions.
That’s why I feel I’m being consumed by an ocean.
I’m so raw and broken I can’t help but bleed.
I doubt there will come a day I will truly be free
from the animal that haunts my mind and soul,
breaks me apart so I no longer feel whole.
I’m standing at a fresh grave I dug for myself
So I can finally end the torment of breaking apart like California’s continental shelf.
I’m about to do the unthinkable as a calm drifts over me.
I turn around and smile as there stands she.
Lights around me flicker as my mind discovers peace.
She hugs me as the hell inside of me draws to a cease.
The clouds depart as I’m given another day.
One more day my ashes won’t be caste out into the bay.
Standing in front of a freshly dug grave,
my soul feels shackled as for I am a slave
too the waves crashing down all around me.
I want to go on a killing spree.
Unleash the demons burning in my heart.
I guess picking up a pen is a better start.
A fire burns above me up in the hemisphere.
A fiend smiles at me since I’m the progenitor.
I’m destined to become a victim of the war.
I will go down leaving behind a trail of gore.
My words are as explicit as the darkness consuming my soul.
Grab my hand, let’s go for a stroll.
Tonight, your life will end with mine.
Say one last prayer as I finish this rhyme.
I’m running as fast as I can, my thoughts are a blur.
Where I am going, I do not know, so I must incur.
The sky is black and my surroundings are gray.
I’m completely lost, can’t seem to find my way.
I see a person in front of me; I’m closing in on him.
Bullets fly near my head; my world is currently dim.
I read the person and knock him to the ground.
I turn him over, it’s my dark side laughing, “I will always be around.”
My legacy revolves around who I was back in the day,
when I was quiet and meek, begging to come out and play.
Who I was back then has been dead for ten years.
Now I feast on your fears as I sip away on beer.
I struggle with my dark desires of fucking all the time.
Who wouldn’t? I’m a beast in my sexual prime!
I struggle to control myself and contain my emotions.
That’s why I feel I’m being consumed by an ocean.
I’m so raw and broken I can’t help but bleed.
I doubt there will come a day I will truly be free
from the animal that haunts my mind and soul,
breaks me apart so I no longer feel whole.
I’m standing at a fresh grave I dug for myself
So I can finally end the torment of breaking apart like California’s continental shelf.
I’m about to do the unthinkable as a calm drifts over me.
I turn around and smile as there stands she.
Lights around me flicker as my mind discovers peace.
She hugs me as the hell inside of me draws to a cease.
The clouds depart as I’m given another day.
One more day my ashes won’t be caste out into the bay.
Published 6th Jan 2018
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Anonymous
6th Jan 2018 11:38pm
I read the person and knock him to the ground.
I turn him over, it’s my dark side laughing, “I will always be around.”
(really liked)
a positive end to the day
when hugged :)
I turn him over, it’s my dark side laughing, “I will always be around.”
(really liked)
a positive end to the day
when hugged :)
7th Jan 2018 00:51am
Thank you so much for reading and giving me your feedback, it's much appreciated.
I really like this piece, especially the "So I can finally end the torment of breaking apart like California’s continental shelf" line (maybe since I am a CA native, so I may be a little biased). Great piece all together. A minor suggestion would to be to take that line (the one I mentioned) and break it up like...
So I can finally end the torment of breaking apart like
California’s continental shelf
But that is completely up to you as the writer (I only mentioned it since you put honest critique). I would do that to some of the other longer lines, but like I sad before... that is completely up to you since it is your work. I enjoy reading your stuff.
So I can finally end the torment of breaking apart like
California’s continental shelf
But that is completely up to you as the writer (I only mentioned it since you put honest critique). I would do that to some of the other longer lines, but like I sad before... that is completely up to you since it is your work. I enjoy reading your stuff.
7th Jan 2018 00:53am
Thank you so much for the read and feedback. I'm always open to honest opinions of my work so i'll take your feedback into consideration. I appreciate any feedback I receive, good bad or indifferent.
7th Jan 2018 5:12am
I felt and saw... as you run away in fear of all the scariness ..
in the dark mountain..
away from the ocean..
Nicely done dear Tyler!
Keep 'em coming :)
<3
H
in the dark mountain..
away from the ocean..
Nicely done dear Tyler!
Keep 'em coming :)
<3
H
7th Jan 2018 4:41pm
Thank you once again for you lovely feedback. It's make my day whenever I receive a comment from you. And no worries, I have plenty more poems to share to keep them coming day after day.
