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Let me taste...
you...i can feel you
but lemme taste you
your throbbing yet not cumming
so i'll be patient
i stay waiting
while i wait for your loving
to explode i'll please
do my best while i tease
i know you feel my wetness
continues to over flow
is it overwhelming you baby?
drink it up
slurp it up
cus i cant wait
to suck yu up
flip me ova if yu need to
look for my treasure
then provide that pleasure
i promise you'll love my taste
now lets cut to the chase
and let ME TASTE....
YOU.
but lemme taste you
your throbbing yet not cumming
so i'll be patient
i stay waiting
while i wait for your loving
to explode i'll please
do my best while i tease
i know you feel my wetness
continues to over flow
is it overwhelming you baby?
drink it up
slurp it up
cus i cant wait
to suck yu up
flip me ova if yu need to
look for my treasure
then provide that pleasure
i promise you'll love my taste
now lets cut to the chase
and let ME TASTE....
YOU.
Published 25th Sep 2011
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Anonymous
26th Sep 2011 2:47am
very nice but not extremely erotic
in the sense that there are more way out poems than this
but it is well written and quite yummy
in the sense that there are more way out poems than this
but it is well written and quite yummy
26th Sep 2011 9:31pm
thanks ") i know its not way out there i was kinda just free writing without thinking too much into it
love your writing by the way
love your writing by the way
26th Sep 2011 11:03pm
Always good to share - give and receive. Keep writing.
Best regards, Butterscotch.
Best regards, Butterscotch.
27th Sep 2011 3:20am
27th Sep 2011 5:38am
.......you find the words to express your desires to "taste". My fav fetish. This almost read like a spoken word thing. Great initial effort and I'm sure it only gets better from here. A suggestion. Let your words "paint" visual pictures. Good erotica is "felt" as well as read. It's a very voyeuristic type of writing.
Enjoyed it.
Enjoyed it.
29th Sep 2011 8:29pm
thank your i really enjoyed yur feed back and i can see what you mean by painting a picture
24th Aug 2014 9:01pm
Not bad, not bad,
But you miss spelled 'you' as 'yu'.
And your writing is little scattered so it's not really bad it does however need some work.
But you miss spelled 'you' as 'yu'.
And your writing is little scattered so it's not really bad it does however need some work.
13th Oct 2014 7:05am
13th Oct 2014 3:51pm
Drink all you want, but don't choke because I'm not going to perform CPR with that shit on your mouth. LOL. But seriously very good ink. Keep up the good work.
24th Oct 2014 5:26am
