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Prettier than Me
Do you remember when I said you could have had me?
But what you told me that you wanted
Was someone prettier than me
So you selected all the face cards from the royal deck
But you were ultimately blinded by what was plain to see
The wild card was the Joker disguised in the garb of a clown
A smooth tongued jester who stole your innocence so deceitfully
A master at sleight-of-hand who tricked the Queen of Hearts
Into giving away her pot of gold underhandedly for free
All the bets were placed, your chips down on the table
The game was called strip-poker but there was more to see
For there was more than naked beauty flushed within your hand
Once this shark bluffed with his grin he stripped away your dignity
Beating you with clubs and spades then cutting you with diamonds
Until finally he broke your heart before he vainly set you free
Leaving you shattered and marked, played a fool for your jewel
So now I feel a bit conceited upon my throne as King of poverty
For if all you wanted was love, remember that I said, you could have had me
But what you told me that you wanted
Was someone prettier than me
So you selected all the face cards from the royal deck
But you were ultimately blinded by what was plain to see
The wild card was the Joker disguised in the garb of a clown
A smooth tongued jester who stole your innocence so deceitfully
A master at sleight-of-hand who tricked the Queen of Hearts
Into giving away her pot of gold underhandedly for free
All the bets were placed, your chips down on the table
The game was called strip-poker but there was more to see
For there was more than naked beauty flushed within your hand
Once this shark bluffed with his grin he stripped away your dignity
Beating you with clubs and spades then cutting you with diamonds
Until finally he broke your heart before he vainly set you free
Leaving you shattered and marked, played a fool for your jewel
So now I feel a bit conceited upon my throne as King of poverty
For if all you wanted was love, remember that I said, you could have had me
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Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 1:43pm
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19th Nov 2017 1:51pm
You really loaded the deck with that comment lil Draonfly...
Thank you for the smile, and comment!
Jj
Thank you for the smile, and comment!
Jj
Re: Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 2:46pm
I'm not sure what that means but it has a "ring" of truth to it...
Thank you Whipped!
JJ
Thank you Whipped!
JJ
Re. Prettier than Me
Well by the photo I saw....it looks like she's sucking his dick. But she was only hitting a bong. Camera angles are a doozy arnt they
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She was never naked, they didnt have sex
Blah blah blah
But they had history years ago
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She was never naked, they didnt have sex
Blah blah blah
But they had history years ago
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Re: Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 3:02pm
What picture?
What bong?
"She was never naked, they didnt have sex
Blah blah blah"
Umm, what are you talking about?
What bong?
"She was never naked, they didnt have sex
Blah blah blah"
Umm, what are you talking about?
Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 3:08pm
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19th Nov 2017 3:12pm
Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 4:18pm
Such a loss for the girl...
Inner beauty overrules outer "beauty.."
very subtly done metaphors and beautifully done work....
-H-
Inner beauty overrules outer "beauty.."
very subtly done metaphors and beautifully done work....
-H-
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Re: Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 4:53pm
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Anonymous
19th Nov 2017 4:32pm
Beautifully written as always JJ :)
(Some crazy comments around here lately - clearly reading something we can't see lol)
(Some crazy comments around here lately - clearly reading something we can't see lol)
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Re: Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 4:51pm
I'm glad you said that Sophie, I was starting to think I was going crazy... lol
And thank you for commenting on my poem!
JJ
And thank you for commenting on my poem!
JJ
Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 4:57pm
Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 6:11pm
I think the King saved his crown by not drawing to this inside straight.
Nice write JJ
Nice write JJ
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Re: Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 10:57pm
I was going for the full house but my house of cards collapsed...
Thanks for commenting T!
JJ
Thanks for commenting T!
JJ
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Anonymous
19th Nov 2017 9:00pm
My hell this is fantastic.
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19th Nov 2017 10:55pm
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Anonymous
20th Nov 2017 2:44am
Ok JJ. You're right. But, I would walk into your hell to read your words.
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Re: Re. Prettier than Me
20th Nov 2017 2:59am
Aww... well, c'mon in, the fires warm and toasty...
And bring your quill, there is much ink boiling and ready to spill!!!
JJ
And bring your quill, there is much ink boiling and ready to spill!!!
JJ
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Anonymous
20th Nov 2017 3:01am
Ok. Where do we start?
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Re: Re. Prettier than Me
20th Nov 2017 3:12am
Well M'Lady, if you want to collaborate on a poem with me, we should take this conversation to somewhere less public...
:) JJ
:) JJ
Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 10:47pm
great poem great metaphor - but what about that bong??? the one on the photograph,... you know!! LMFAO I think it may be a full moon ok all joking aside it was a fantastic poem / moral tale and I loved it :-)))
A big ole bear hug coming your way :-)))))))))
A big ole bear hug coming your way :-)))))))))
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Re: Re. Prettier than Me
19th Nov 2017 10:53pm
Thanks David, I knew I could count on you to cheer me up! And as to that other comment, she also sent me a couple PM's and I still have no idea what she was talking about. The PM's were just as strange. Completely out of the blue...
Glad you liked it!
JJ
Glad you liked it!
JJ