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Rage
i can't get it straight
supression of emotion
is what i'm master of
bone deep
my internal rage
burns out of contol
& don't you know
i feed it
drug demons bark
& i give them fresh meat
pieces of my inner beauty
self dignity
& pride
all to appease
the beast that craves
with a race to the death's gates
i can't get there fast enough
as i run with the down trodden
stepped on
people of the world
i left my inner child
outside in the cold
with the devil
when i wanted to play a sick
& twisted game called fate
i played with it
like i could win
the decks are stacked
it's rigged
the odds are against me
at ever succeeding
but i'm placing my bet
all on red
my heart's on the line
& i'm all in
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Re. Rage
6th Nov 2017 5:07am
Are thee Vulcan or are thee Human?
Pride is best left to be fed upon by your demons.
Rage is not a game you can bluff your way through. Winning requires a steady hand...
Allow your feelings to guide you, the rest will offset the rage!
JJ
Pride is best left to be fed upon by your demons.
Rage is not a game you can bluff your way through. Winning requires a steady hand...
Allow your feelings to guide you, the rest will offset the rage!
JJ
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Re: Re. Rage
6th Nov 2017 5:36am
thank you dearest JJ I see your point on the pride area & I deeply appreciate your insight on the rage part..
~Raven
~Raven
Re. Rage
6th Nov 2017 5:46am
behind
the struggle
visible still
is guts of steel
spilling
rage
in ink.
liberating in vapors
the pain.
expression.
delivered.
the struggle
visible still
is guts of steel
spilling
rage
in ink.
liberating in vapors
the pain.
expression.
delivered.
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Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:21am
Re. Rage
6th Nov 2017 7:46am
"bone deep
my internal rage
burns out of contol
& don't you know
i feed it"
this declaration of self against the selfish...the tension holding the sentences together is thick...much love-J
my internal rage
burns out of contol
& don't you know
i feed it"
this declaration of self against the selfish...the tension holding the sentences together is thick...much love-J
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Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:20am
thank you dearest Jeff for feeling those lines & giving me more perspective on them..
~Raven
~Raven
Re. Rage
Anonymous
6th Nov 2017 1:17pm
Brilliant piece of work!!
Drug demons bark
& I give them fresh meat
Pieces of my inner beauty
Self dignity
& pride
WOW!! Those descriptions!! Unbelievable!!
A true masterpiece!!
Drug demons bark
& I give them fresh meat
Pieces of my inner beauty
Self dignity
& pride
WOW!! Those descriptions!! Unbelievable!!
A true masterpiece!!
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Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:21am
thank you dearest poet your response is awesome & gifted me smiles :)
~Raven
~Raven
Re. Rage
Anonymous
6th Nov 2017 6:21pm
"& i'm all in" - a powerful closing to an incredibly strong write declaring your convictions...I wish you nothing but winnings when you're there at the table...filter and disperse the rage and direction will be less clouded...
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:22am
thank you beautiful poetess I deeply cherish your insightful thoughts..
~Raven
~Raven
Re. Rage
6th Nov 2017 9:31pm
Really like the short lines and sharp line breaks ... my favorite! Can really feel this one Raven.
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Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:23am
Re. Rage
7th Nov 2017 1:27am
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13th Nov 2017 9:24am
Re. Rage
7th Nov 2017 3:07am
"bone deep
my internal rage
burns out of contol
& don't you know
i feed it
drug demons bark
& i give them fresh meat
pieces of my inner beauty
self dignity
& pride "
The tone you use somehow creates this royal emission of rage that you describe...
Such strong emotions it triggers...
Nicely done..!
-H-
my internal rage
burns out of contol
& don't you know
i feed it
drug demons bark
& i give them fresh meat
pieces of my inner beauty
self dignity
& pride "
The tone you use somehow creates this royal emission of rage that you describe...
Such strong emotions it triggers...
Nicely done..!
-H-
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Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:26am
thank you lovely poetess I'm happy the emotion I felt was properly conveyed in a way the reader could too..
~Raven
~Raven
Re. Rage
7th Nov 2017 6:27pm
Lots of personal relevance for me here, the suppression of emotion and abuse of recreational substances. Still there's something to be said for placing it all on red, depending on what that color represents. If it's rage I'd put my money elsewhere. Really enjoyed this Raven!
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Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:27am
thank you dearest poet for understanding & all on red is my heart :)
~Raven
~Raven
Re. Rage
Anonymous
7th Nov 2017 7:52pm
suppressed emotions landed me in a country
and i no longer knew my name..
Drugs or none at all, just onow every words
climbed up and down my veins..just too
indescribable how this truly made me feel
kisses to your hand beautiful
and i no longer knew my name..
Drugs or none at all, just onow every words
climbed up and down my veins..just too
indescribable how this truly made me feel
kisses to your hand beautiful
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Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:28am
thank you beautiful poetess just knowing you are there & get me means the world..
~Raven
~Raven
Re: Re. Rage
13th Nov 2017 9:28am
Re. Rage
Anonymous
10th Nov 2017 10:08am
Thank you beautiful. Raw and real my dear .
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13th Nov 2017 9:29am
Re. Rage
23rd Dec 2017 3:05am
I am beyond lost for words... all I can say is absolutely beautiful choice of words.
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27th Dec 2017 8:15pm