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Sepsis
Coagulated compliments crack
chapped and split
on guiled lips
Innumerable constellations
cloying clots caught
curving...
swerving
through stances of these sickly minds
Sand sucks you
quickly...
thickly
And they smother your breath
with culpable hands
chapped and split
on guiled lips
Innumerable constellations
cloying clots caught
curving...
swerving
through stances of these sickly minds
Sand sucks you
quickly...
thickly
And they smother your breath
with culpable hands
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Re. Sepsis
30th Oct 2017 2:15am
Anonymous
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30th Oct 2017 5:25am
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Re. Sepsis
30th Oct 2017 12:21pm
Each word is so impacting, you have a skill beyond words! :) This first stanza really reeled me in, and the definitive ending stopped me dead in my tracks. Pure excellence AtoMik!!
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Re: Re. Sepsis
30th Oct 2017 1:36pm
Re. Sepsis
1st Nov 2017 00:52am
you have such a skill with words - I love reading your poems out loud :-)
excellent ink :-)
excellent ink :-)
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Re. Sepsis
2nd Nov 2017 4:02am
I have to agree with those above, your word usage
leaves such an impact without being overly complex.
Much enjoyed...
leaves such an impact without being overly complex.
Much enjoyed...
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Re: Re. Sepsis
2nd Nov 2017 2:04pm
Re. Sepsis
Anonymous
4th Nov 2017 2:01am
AtoMik.. truly brilliant.. from the heart.. you got skills.. much respect..
Dave
Dave

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