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Corruption
Why do I pine the love and then
Mourn that which has never risen?
A humming dulcimer when struck,
Night rain pelts the wrought iron mute.
Is there no one (else) to respond?
I lost everything to his love.
Alone. So forever alone
As your pale hand reassures me.
You've always found me beautiful
In spite of the bleak perversions.
Your distant memory humbles,
Incredulous, you resurrect.
Seeking not penance, but to have
My century dashed in the flames
Of your corruption; my body
Controlling the conflagration.
Becoming one at last as my
Bone-white ash blows back onto you.
Published 27th Oct 2017
| Edited 16th Sep 2020
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27th Oct 2017 7:53am
I adore the darkness dripping from this outstanding piece. The two lines are especially cutting...
" Becoming one at last as my
Bone-white ash blows back onto you"
I got chills.
~anonshadow
" Becoming one at last as my
Bone-white ash blows back onto you"
I got chills.
~anonshadow
27th Oct 2017 8:05am
Ah my dear friend Anon, I could not ask for more for where my piece has taken you, and for how you have described its affects. Thank you so very much, and for the recommend, my gosh.
~~Jade
~~Jade
27th Oct 2017 9:44am
Thanks for the ink!
Opening lines were spot on and set the flow for the remainder of your poem.👌 Good length as well, just enough and yet not enough.
Opening lines were spot on and set the flow for the remainder of your poem.👌 Good length as well, just enough and yet not enough.
27th Oct 2017 10:30am
1st Dec 2017 12:30pm
Thank you so much, SweetO - you've always been wonderfully supportive. I must apologize for the lag in my reply. I missed a number of comments to this piece so I'm catching up now.
2nd Dec 2017 9:58am
27th Oct 2017 3:09pm
1st Dec 2017 12:34pm
Thanks, Ed. Appreciations for you stopping by for a read & your thoughts. Apologies for the late reply. A lot's been happening since this past summer and I'm in a constant state of catch-up mode.
27th Oct 2017 4:03pm
Oh this so good ... wonderful line breaks ... seductive flow ... plucked words that tickle my ear.
Ahh, thank you Lil D for sharing with me where my write takes you and what it does to/for you. ^.^
p.s. And please forgive my late reply as I have had many issues, both fortunate & unfortunate, that have kept me running in place since last summer.<3
p.s. And please forgive my late reply as I have had many issues, both fortunate & unfortunate, that have kept me running in place since last summer.<3
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30th Nov 2017 3:21pm
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