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Reality
Caught in the net of continuous thoughts
Lost in the wonders of marvellous evils
Taken by the complacency of dirty deeds of life
Butchering the youth of nourished purity
Becoming a pig of the sane insanity
Only but a impure residue left-
in the pallet of humanity
Daydreaming..
Fantasizing...
Idealizing...
Now sluggish-
by the sugared whispers of empty worth
Mind weakened-
helpless to counteract the interference of malice
There's no valediction to the befouled new nature
Already clouded, and faded ;
"What is the meaning of this meaningless future?"
Development?
Improvement?
Statements of such constructive manners-
now only a pun
The punctures of the society cannot bring success
Lost in the wonders of marvellous evils
Taken by the complacency of dirty deeds of life
Butchering the youth of nourished purity
Becoming a pig of the sane insanity
Only but a impure residue left-
in the pallet of humanity
Daydreaming..
Fantasizing...
Idealizing...
Now sluggish-
by the sugared whispers of empty worth
Mind weakened-
helpless to counteract the interference of malice
There's no valediction to the befouled new nature
Already clouded, and faded ;
"What is the meaning of this meaningless future?"
Development?
Improvement?
Statements of such constructive manners-
now only a pun
The punctures of the society cannot bring success
Written by
SourMelon0313
(H)
Published 25th Oct 2017
| Edited 13th Apr 2022
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Re. Reality
25th Oct 2017 5:53am
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25th Oct 2017 6:22am
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25th Oct 2017 12:01pm
Oh my sweetness ... this one claims the throne of reigning favorite of your poems for me. Love the structure and it's sage message. Provoking but not preachy.
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25th Oct 2017 7:47pm
Re. Reality
25th Oct 2017 9:02pm
I read your poem as a condemnation of a society incapable of escaping the cycle of self-imposed maladies of all kinds, and as such, I found it very interesting and I liked it a lot. (Reading it, I thought some expressions in it, sounded like translating from another language. Do you write in more than one?)
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Re: Re. Reality
25th Oct 2017 9:49pm
You have interpreted just the way I had intended to! lol I'm so glad.. Yes, some of the expressions might seem a bit misplaced or awkward, because English is my second language. I tried to keep it simple and I used the word "pun" instead of "joke" because I thought it would flow well with the "puncture" at the end...(these I purposefully tried to express it in a such a way but I thought it seems a bit funky...) My native language is Korean! lol But to be completely honest, it's easier to express and speak my mind in English rather than Korean.. I've lived here for too long... But I'm glad you found my works interesting to read! :) Thank you!! I really appreciate your comments and reads!
Re: Re. Reality
25th Oct 2017 10:42pm
Don't worry, you're doing fine... English is my second language, also, so I know the difficulties.
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Anonymous
25th Oct 2017 11:48pm
Thought provoking - excellent write :)
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26th Oct 2017 00:10am
Re. Reality
2nd Nov 2017 00:32am
Your thoughts run run deeper than oceans span...very very impressive vocabulary n wisdom...
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Re: Re. Reality
2nd Nov 2017 00:39am
Thank you so much..!
It's just thoughts that runs in my mind , which have been lingering for quite some time...recently I see this a lot so I wrote..!
Really appreciate your support,
-H-
It's just thoughts that runs in my mind , which have been lingering for quite some time...recently I see this a lot so I wrote..!
Really appreciate your support,
-H-
Re. Reality
3rd Nov 2017 00:57am
You...a beautiful woman and a dark write beyond the joyful golden age of disillusionment...What now, shall you reinvent yourself or let your soul seep into dark water labyrinths of despair????
xo
xo
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Re: Re. Reality
3rd Nov 2017 3:16am
My, oh my...! What a enchanting comment you have gifted me..!
Thank you so much, your words have left me in all smiles to such compliment and feedback..! There's always darkness lingering even in the most heavenly of all places, greatly appreciated fellow poet! :)
-H-
Thank you so much, your words have left me in all smiles to such compliment and feedback..! There's always darkness lingering even in the most heavenly of all places, greatly appreciated fellow poet! :)
-H-
Re. Reality
3rd Nov 2017 9:35am
yes and i love the poetic theater of despair myself bit it doesn't mean there is not beauty and redemption in life too...
"The poet
purging private pleasures and torments
for the bemusement of the world" lol
"The poet
purging private pleasures and torments
for the bemusement of the world" lol
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