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'First Time...'
It was a
Once
upon a time
just experiencing
my lifetime I met
her...
We'd slip away
rummaging thru
our passions
like newborns
without sight...
She was bodacious
n' fragile, light years
pass, as we're undone
Our clothing seemingly
disintegrated, the environ
an eclectic collection
of peace n' chaos...
She tactfully lays
me back, pressed
her petals, softly
along my chest...
The flower opens
n' I'm immediately
enraptured by her
fragrant jewel...
It's not long before
we had fallen apart...
our wet bodies n'
ragged breathing,
Proof...
A first time
is always
a very
memorable
time...
Published 15th Oct 2017
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15th Oct 2017 8:46pm
'rummaging thru
our passions
like newborns
without sight..'
sublime .....
this is one sensual vibe bro...
very captivating
our passions
like newborns
without sight..'
sublime .....
this is one sensual vibe bro...
very captivating
15th Oct 2017 9:12pm
Hey bro. You know I'm honored by your continued support don't you?...truly grateful always
15th Oct 2017 11:11pm
"A first time
is always
a very
memorable
time..."
Couldn't agree more..! Lol except my first experience was very...awkward lol was out of curiousity and turned out horrible but hey..! Experience is experience lol very beautifully done :)
is always
a very
memorable
time..."
Couldn't agree more..! Lol except my first experience was very...awkward lol was out of curiousity and turned out horrible but hey..! Experience is experience lol very beautifully done :)
15th Oct 2017 11:14pm
Yea, never said its always good lol...thank u my dear for ur support. It's appreciated. :)
16th Oct 2017 3:59am
Yeah, some first times "Thank God" , others "If only you could"
Nice as always
Nice as always
16th Oct 2017 10:56am
Lol I'm sure those bad first times are still memories, not easily forgotten though lol but Yea, it'd be nice to have a few first times lol...thank you...always grateful for you.... :)
Anonymous
16th Oct 2017 4:55am
i like what i think it means,.. must be nice.
16th Oct 2017 10:58am
Aaawww...sweetie... I'm sorry to hear that you haven't had one :(...thanks for the visit though...
16th Oct 2017 1:56pm
Oh this takes me back ... summer at the lake ... my first time. Kissing forever till our lips were raw ... then sliding into each other without thinking or talking (or birth control) ... magic till the passion cooled ... and the panic set in. Then the desperate waiting ... till my body told me we dodged the bullet 😀
16th Oct 2017 2:19pm
Truly got lucky it sounds like... a good experience n no Lil one before u were ready... I'd say, really memorable for u thanks for the support.
16th Oct 2017 5:23pm
“She tactfully lays
me back, pressed
her petals, softly
along my chest...
The flower opens
n' I'm immediately
enraptured by her
fragrant jewel...”
You’ve worded this SO beautifully Poetik! This may an erotic poem, but you’ve captured the sweetness of love-making here and kept this write so delicate. Much enjoyed :)
me back, pressed
her petals, softly
along my chest...
The flower opens
n' I'm immediately
enraptured by her
fragrant jewel...”
You’ve worded this SO beautifully Poetik! This may an erotic poem, but you’ve captured the sweetness of love-making here and kept this write so delicate. Much enjoyed :)
17th Oct 2017 00:37am
16th Oct 2017 7:22pm
"A first time
is always
a very
memorable
time..."
How very true...
You make everything so beautiful, magical...
is always
a very
memorable
time..."
How very true...
You make everything so beautiful, magical...
17th Oct 2017 4:01am
Wow, your comment is so sweet it feels magical... :) thank you dear lady... appreciate you much :)
17th Oct 2017 00:12am
" She was bodacious
n' fragile, light years
pass, as we're undone "
Excellent imagery, PoetikOne. Strong but fragile. A lovely rumination captured poetically.
n' fragile, light years
pass, as we're undone "
Excellent imagery, PoetikOne. Strong but fragile. A lovely rumination captured poetically.
17th Oct 2017 4:04am
Ahavati... Honestly, your comments are like sweetly beautiful poems themselves, n I remain very grateful for your support :)
17th Oct 2017 4:36pm
Yes yes yessss! This was stunningly beautiful and oh so sensual. Loved it.
17th Oct 2017 6:44pm
18th Oct 2017 1:51am
Nice as always. Damn nothing will ever feel as good as the first time.
18th Oct 2017 2:58am
22nd Oct 2017 11:00pm
It's that first time...the one we keep searching for...leaves a certain lacking and a wanting. A very fine piece of poetry P.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
22nd Oct 2017 11:25pm
Oh don't u know it bro. Always searching! lol... Thank u, very much appreciate it :)
Anonymous
29th Oct 2017 4:11pm
I typically think of erotica as being very gritty and even a little obscene, but this is very elegant while maintaining a stimulating and intriguing tone. Really well done
29th Oct 2017 4:18pm
I like to pen it in a variety of ways
n trust me, whatever way I present it
what is always intended is to inspire
desire lol... So grateful, ur comments are very nice to read. :)
n trust me, whatever way I present it
what is always intended is to inspire
desire lol... So grateful, ur comments are very nice to read. :)
