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My Writing Is Hamburger
Bon appetite.....
(but keep the Rolaids
well within reach).
My thoughts come like scrapes
of left over trimmings
and placed upon page
to start the beginning
Then mixed with some spices
to give it a flavor
hopefully something that
someone will savor
And once in awhile
I manage to string
enough in one place
to make someone sing.
But, when it turns out
like rancid meatloaf
I do deeply pray
that someone won't croak
Perhaps it's just me
these feelings inside
while pen's in my hand
and I start to scribe
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
4th Oct 2017 2:41am
I really like this and it easy to see the connection with my poem 'Papers' but I disagree - I prefer yours - the metaphor is very clever and I like the way you crafted and thought this out :-)
Excellent write :-)
Excellent write :-)
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Re: Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
4th Oct 2017 3:23am
David, my friend, we will again have to disagree, for yours is the better of the two. :-)
Thank you so much for being here. I truly feel we have found a lasting friendship.
Thank you so much for being here. I truly feel we have found a lasting friendship.
Re: Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
4th Oct 2017 3:24am
Re: Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
4th Oct 2017 7:23am
Alright, I will concede out of friendship this time, but you owe me one. :-)
Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
4th Oct 2017 11:12am
Amazing flow, n content...
Truly wouldn't say your ink
is anything but outstanding... :)
Truly wouldn't say your ink
is anything but outstanding... :)
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Re: Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
Gee Poe, I love when you sweet talk me, but then you never get to taste the ones I throw in the garbage. :-)
Thanks for stopping by, your visits always make my day.
Thanks for stopping by, your visits always make my day.
Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
4th Oct 2017 4:07pm
Re: Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
4th Oct 2017 4:37pm
I'm glad you enjoyed this one, but keep a good supply of ketchup handy to mask the flavor of some in the past. :-)
Thanks Raven, for the visit and compliment.
Thanks Raven, for the visit and compliment.
Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
5th Oct 2017 8:06pm
Re: Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
5th Oct 2017 8:45pm
Yea, this one turned out OK, only needed a little salt and pepper. Thanks for stopping by and the kind comment. It's appreciated.
Re: Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
5th Oct 2017 8:49pm
Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
5th Oct 2017 9:26pm
well.. if the writer feels so..
yet
to the reader
it is but a delight.
unique. indeed.
yet
to the reader
it is but a delight.
unique. indeed.
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Re: Re. My Writing Is Hamburger
5th Oct 2017 10:47pm
Yes, like the poem comment, I've been politely called unique also. :-)))) Your visit and "Polite" comment was a pleasure.