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I Long To Be A Goshawk
In High School i had a thing for Lorelei. She was cool and indifferent while inescapably hot and near
i wrote this to impress her but never showed it to her
I long to be a goshawk
and glide in the sky
like a butterfly
until I die
with a high sigh
oh my
then will you cry
Lorelei?
i wrote this to impress her but never showed it to her
I long to be a goshawk
and glide in the sky
like a butterfly
until I die
with a high sigh
oh my
then will you cry
Lorelei?
Published 21st Sep 2017
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Anonymous
21st Sep 2017 11:52am
Freakin love this!!
* not the most informative of comments i'll grant you but that's one hell of a write...Bravo!
Ben x
* not the most informative of comments i'll grant you but that's one hell of a write...Bravo!
Ben x
The teen in me is overjoyed that you love it Ben, thank you :-) It's funny that now all those years later as i go through my High School poetry, the serious compositions seem less interesting than the simpler ones i worked up the nerve to give Lorelei a flower with a tiny note attached on Valentines Day (my birthday) It went like this Being too shy to tell you on the spot I'll say it with this flower I like you a lot. It had zero effect :-)
Anonymous
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6th Oct 2017 7:24pm
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6th Oct 2017 10:03pm
You may be right. It's not so much what we did that we regret it's what we didn't do. Thanks for the comment Danny :-)
18th May 2023 2:30pm
Lovely. And as you mentionned above, regrets are a killer. Good luck in the comp, Regards, Robert.
18th May 2023 2:41pm
