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Four 'Always' In Four Lines For Tight Jean Back Pockets
Shit inherited, always, not proportionate to meekness exhibited...
Not, always, a happy meeting when you, finally, find yourself...
Dreams are not, always, killed... Occasionally, they die natural deaths...
Truth
is, always, elsewhere
and never in the middle...
Not, always, a happy meeting when you, finally, find yourself...
Dreams are not, always, killed... Occasionally, they die natural deaths...
Truth
is, always, elsewhere
and never in the middle...
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Re. Four 'Always' In Four Lines For Tight Jean Back Pockets
6th Sep 2017 5:29pm
...except there are more than four lines. :)
other than that, i really like this. four little snippets, that could be longer, but are just right to fit into my hands as i put them in my back pockets. away from prying eyes. and only for my perusing.
well done!
other than that, i really like this. four little snippets, that could be longer, but are just right to fit into my hands as i put them in my back pockets. away from prying eyes. and only for my perusing.
well done!
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Re: Re. Four 'Always' In Four Lines For Tight Jean Back Pockets
6th Sep 2017 6:57pm
Lines become very independent in poems and tend to act on their own (like novel characters lead their author to unexpected places). You did well keeping them away from prying eyes - they are a bit shy. Thank you much for commenting.
Re. Four 'Always' In Four Lines For Tight Jean Back Pockets
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Sep 2017 8:36pm
6th Sep 2017 8:35pm
the first three lines could be the elsewhere - for some reason I'm thinking of the two women who were harlots standing before King Solomon, but this is just the way my mind works.
Excellent! :)
Excellent! :)
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Re: Re. Four 'Always' In Four Lines For Tight Jean Back Pockets
6th Sep 2017 8:52pm
Wow! I know the story from elementary school. I remember it making an impression on me, but never thought about it since. The way your mind works, works wonders! Thank you so much!
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7th Sep 2017 00:07am
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Re. Four 'Always' In Four Lines For Tight Jean Back Pockets
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Sep 2017 8:11pm
8th Sep 2017 8:10pm
Yess!
Damn it Takis.. I want to lick that brain
of yours. ;)
Good sweet biterish stuff.
Damn it Takis.. I want to lick that brain
of yours. ;)
Good sweet biterish stuff.
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8th Sep 2017 8:56pm
Re: Re. Four 'Always' In Four Lines For Tight Jean Back Pockets
Anonymous
8th Sep 2017 10:22pm
Lol understand
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8th Sep 2017 10:30pm