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Twisted desires
He likes her, she likes me, I like both of them it's plain to see..
I invite them over for some midnight twister, I got red and she got blue she starts to hum ( I'm in love with the shape of you!! )..
He got green I got yellow ( Can I see your tool you sexi fellow? ) We're all twisted up it's kinda hard to untangle, need to take them both upstairs and do the tango..
He likes her, she likes me, I like them both enough to do a 3..
I invite them over for some midnight twister, I got red and she got blue she starts to hum ( I'm in love with the shape of you!! )..
He got green I got yellow ( Can I see your tool you sexi fellow? ) We're all twisted up it's kinda hard to untangle, need to take them both upstairs and do the tango..
He likes her, she likes me, I like them both enough to do a 3..
Published 25th Aug 2017
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25th Aug 2017 2:02pm
This poem is a hoot.
Isn't tango a dance for 2 which contradicts your meaning. So could you say?
"take them both upstairs and do the triple tango.. "
TBH I think this poem is such fun but I think it would be even more fun if you cleaned up the rhythm, tight as a tango. Maybe you are trying for a loose, tangled effect to mimic the action of the game???
Isn't tango a dance for 2 which contradicts your meaning. So could you say?
"take them both upstairs and do the triple tango.. "
TBH I think this poem is such fun but I think it would be even more fun if you cleaned up the rhythm, tight as a tango. Maybe you are trying for a loose, tangled effect to mimic the action of the game???
25th Aug 2017 6:09pm
25th Aug 2017 4:34pm
