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The Long Walk
How long have I gone down this path?
How long has it been?
I've lost all sense of time, faced countless obstacles, and overcoming them has left me numb and exhausted,
but not defeated...
Some would ask "why go on"?
Or say "just give up"!!!
To them I answer simply "no I will never stop". The road may be long, the path may be arduous, but something keeps me from collapsing.
Awaiting in the end of this accursed is a promised embrace, of my only two reasons for being.
Their light shines my path, the promise of their warmth moves my shattered bones foward.
And until I reach them and feel their gentle hands on my weary bones , I'll never stop, and continue on,
the long walk....
How long has it been?
I've lost all sense of time, faced countless obstacles, and overcoming them has left me numb and exhausted,
but not defeated...
Some would ask "why go on"?
Or say "just give up"!!!
To them I answer simply "no I will never stop". The road may be long, the path may be arduous, but something keeps me from collapsing.
Awaiting in the end of this accursed is a promised embrace, of my only two reasons for being.
Their light shines my path, the promise of their warmth moves my shattered bones foward.
And until I reach them and feel their gentle hands on my weary bones , I'll never stop, and continue on,
the long walk....
Written by
Nebur
Published 19th Aug 2017
| Edited 20th Aug 2017
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Re. The Long Walk
20th Aug 2017 4:37am
I enjoyed this write, the layout especially.
There are a few typos that need attention however:
*To them I answe aimply...............
*but something but something (?), if the word something was meant to be doubled up, possibly use (but something, something, keeps me moving............
*foward (missing the "r")
Small errors, of which I am also guilty of. My OCD can be a pain at times, to myself and others.
Welcome to the Deep Under..........
There are a few typos that need attention however:
*To them I answe aimply...............
*but something but something (?), if the word something was meant to be doubled up, possibly use (but something, something, keeps me moving............
*foward (missing the "r")
Small errors, of which I am also guilty of. My OCD can be a pain at times, to myself and others.
Welcome to the Deep Under..........
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Re: Re. The Long Walk
20th Aug 2017 6:55am
Thanks for the letting me know about the typos😄 I was doing it on my phone and the keys are kind of tricky.😄
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20th Aug 2017 7:00am
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Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 6:29am
So many of us experience that long walk...daunting at times admittedly...I wish you much luck on your path! I enjoyed this as tryst did...welcome to DUP!
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Re: Re. The Long Walk
20th Aug 2017 7:00am
Thank you I tried not to use any direct references, I wanted to let the reader use their imagination to make the long walk look like what they percieve it to be.😀
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Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 8:51am
This is stellar !!
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Re. The Long Walk
20th Aug 2017 12:18pm
Awesome write, loved the layout, welcome to DU look forward to reading more of your work
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Re: Re. The Long Walk
22nd Aug 2017 3:09am
Thanks i tried to leave out any direct reference to any physical being or thing. I wanted to let the readers imagination make those on their own. 😀😄
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21st Aug 2017 9:38am
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23rd Aug 2017 10:48pm
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Anonymous
18th Sep 2017 2:14am
Nice poem welcome underground
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