Abandoned by God

Fairy.. this is powerful.. and so much truth.. to how the world really works.. much respect..



























Dave

I am glad you understand this, I am slowly learning as I grow older, it takes time and painful realizations to grow. Thank you for stopping by!

Great

Thank you so much!

i know of your pain dear travelling one..

many hugs

I'm glad you understand, thanks so much for commenting! :)

I can relate to this. So many are faking happy. Strength, new friend.

Thank you so much :)

I can see how that would work. I personally like the abruptness it brings, but I respect that. Thank you for commenting!

I felt a bit differently...
Abruptness, fairy, yes - but I felt a sense of 'falling': spiraling down, falling into an abyss. Dejection. The last line feels like/is rock bottom.
Hence I said I could relate to this piece.

If I take the context, the innate 'feeling' behind your poem - for me - , then I can completely sense this falling down (and apart) via the single line, forcing me to get that 'downward spiral' feeling. I think it's brilliant if it gave me that feeling. Your flow works, for the meaning behind this poem.

:) xo

This is an interesting perspective, didn't even realize that until you brought it to light, maybe one doesn't recognize themselves falling if they are in fact falling.. Thanks for the perspective, I appreciate all comments received :)

I enjoy reading the different perspectives so much, and the insightful feedback really helps. We write, but ultimately it's how others experience our writing...

When I read poems written in this format I find that I feel free to control the pace which allows me to connect with the words better. In other words I format it in my head to fit my interpretation.

I'm glad this format helps you Post, I quite enjoy it for a change! Thanks for stopping by :)

I bet, relatable by many.
as for me, no so relatable
as a witch and student of zen Buddhism
I have trouble believing in the Deities
though I do honor Selene and Gaia,
often.

Love this spill, though
the flow and structure
works well