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Anatomy of a Critique
can be that of Human design;
a cleft palate of birth-defect
needing specialized attention
Perhaps born perfectly healthy;
Imagery peaches and cream, ten
Metaphors and Flow all wiggling
Yet. . .somewhere along the Verse
meaning faltered, contracted disease
warranting reconstructive Syntax
Or perhaps became an amputee
injured during emotional conflict
requiring a prosthetic of Words
The Anatomy of a Critique
isn't all flaws and suggested
improvements; it's Ancient:
an Art form of deep Sentiment
learning new methods of getting
ideas across through Poetry
It's newfound Hope to wounded
an Advocate for Understanding;
Champion of Communication
Preserved for Future generations
~
Italics by JohnnyBlaze, my Best Friend and constant source of Love & Inspiration ❤
a cleft palate of birth-defect
needing specialized attention
Perhaps born perfectly healthy;
Imagery peaches and cream, ten
Metaphors and Flow all wiggling
Yet. . .somewhere along the Verse
meaning faltered, contracted disease
warranting reconstructive Syntax
Or perhaps became an amputee
injured during emotional conflict
requiring a prosthetic of Words
The Anatomy of a Critique
isn't all flaws and suggested
improvements; it's Ancient:
an Art form of deep Sentiment
learning new methods of getting
ideas across through Poetry
It's newfound Hope to wounded
an Advocate for Understanding;
Champion of Communication
Preserved for Future generations
~
Italics by JohnnyBlaze, my Best Friend and constant source of Love & Inspiration ❤
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 28th Jul 2017
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Re. Anatomy of a Critique
28th Jul 2017 7:32pm
This is very thought full...
Although I suggest, you rearrange stanzas 1, L2, n 2 L3 n...lmao JK!! It's perfectly expressed as far as I'm concerned :)
Nice collab.
Although I suggest, you rearrange stanzas 1, L2, n 2 L3 n...lmao JK!! It's perfectly expressed as far as I'm concerned :)
Nice collab.
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Re: Re. Anatomy of a Critique
28th Jul 2017 7:35pm
Re. Anatomy of a Critique
Anonymous
28th Jul 2017 8:03pm
All I can say at the moment is just WOW.
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Anonymous
28th Jul 2017 10:22pm
That you managed to put this together in a few hours is AMAZING. "Or perhaps became an amputee injured during emotional conflict requiring a prosthetic of Words" This SO resonates with an idea I had a little while back; that being gifted in an area of the arts is like the physically handicapped being given a headstart in a foot race. Some of us need that creative edge to help us better cope and make it through this life.
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Re: Re. Anatomy of a Critique
Ohhhh! You should expand on that idea! And thank you. It's easy when you have a wonderful Muse. ❤
Re. Anatomy of a Critique
29th Jul 2017 4:45pm
I will never think of a critique in the same way again - another DU plus - it expands your mind and learning - thanks for sharing this :-)
excellent ink :-)
excellent ink :-)
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Re: Re. Anatomy of a Critique
Thank you, David! That was EXACTLY the intention of this write. We want people to see Critique for what it is: A Medic for Wounded Verse; not a critic for the ego.
Re. Anatomy of a Critique
29th Jul 2017 6:19pm
the two of you fucking rock.
that is all
y'all can carry on being amazeballs now
xo
that is all
y'all can carry on being amazeballs now
xo
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Re: Re. Anatomy of a Critique
29th Jul 2017 6:24pm
for real, vati. i'm considering tucking my balls & doing tirtha to the critique gods :) the two of you are an inspiring team
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Re: Re. Anatomy of a Critique
29th Jul 2017 6:39pm
Well come on and join Group Olympus, Katja! Where we rule with Love, Kindness, Compassion, and Consideration. We'll take all the positive prayers and energy we can get! ❤ He's certainly the best thing that's ever happened to my Life. 💕 Thank you again. XO
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Anonymous
29th Jul 2017 8:22pm
Vati brings out the best in me. I can't imagine a better partner when it comes to doing critique or anything else for that matter. ❤ Thank you for your kind words. It's the best encouragement knowing "we're" on the right path.
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Re. Anatomy of a Critique
29th Jul 2017 6:23pm
Putting 'critique' into a whole new light, dimension ... so beautifully constructed ... fabulous joint effort,
pen bow
ox
pen bow
ox
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Re: Re. Anatomy of a Critique
29th Jul 2017 6:40pm
Thank you, JeJe! That was and IS our EXACT purpose! Thank you for seeing it. ❤
Re. Anatomy of a Critique
29th Jul 2017 11:30pm
Damn, look'at'alla'themcomments........makes me dizzy, but
tis
a worthy
(w)rite
in
deed.
tis
a worthy
(w)rite
in
deed.
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Re: Re. Anatomy of a Critique
30th Jul 2017 2:43am
Re. Anatomy of a Critique
found this
more
in depth
anatomy of a critic
than of a critique
well versed.
more
in depth
anatomy of a critic
than of a critique
well versed.
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Re: Re. Anatomy of a Critique
One of the lovely things about Poetry is that it speaks to each reader individually. Thank you.
Re. Anatomy of a Critique
Anonymous
6th Aug 2017 1:38pm
Although i still consider myself a newbie here and not greatly familiar with both of your writing styles this is and amazing collab ) very thought provoking and your voice combine as one seamlessly, which IMO is the sign of a great collab unless the poem is a "two voice" kinda deal.
Epic both of you )
B
Epic both of you )
B
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6th Aug 2017 2:45pm
Re. Anatomy of a Critique
Anonymous
30th Aug 2017 3:26pm
Excellent, thank you for read ❤
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