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a broken man has nothing to offer
he sat
on the park bench
resting his head
between the palms
of his hands
elbows dug
into his thighs
a child enthusiastically asks
"wanna be our goalkeeper?
there's one short on our side"
he stayed unmoved
face, void of reaction
let alone an emotion
the children looked
at each other
bemused
left him alone
shaking their heads
as they moved
all he could see
and feel
was
the tinnitus
inside his ears
and the echo
of a bang
felt
on the inside
of a church bell
he sat there
a broken man
and a broken man
has nothing to offer
Published 27th Jul 2017
| Edited 13th Aug 2017
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27th Jul 2017 4:02pm
Oft, the ones who are troubled souls or broken, are the ones that possess a heart of gold !
I wouldn't say a heart of gold was worth nothing, if offered... 👑🌷😎🎈🌞
I wouldn't say a heart of gold was worth nothing, if offered... 👑🌷😎🎈🌞
28th Jul 2017 11:09am
27th Jul 2017 6:18pm
Even if broken, the opportunity to mend is a worthy offer to oneself and a welcomed act to others.
This is thought provoking, thank you for mental nourishment.
This is thought provoking, thank you for mental nourishment.
mend
the opportunity
for it
that is a stage
after the breaking
is complete
peers
exchange of views
always
nourishing
even
for the cold ones.
:-)
the opportunity
for it
that is a stage
after the breaking
is complete
peers
exchange of views
always
nourishing
even
for the cold ones.
:-)
28th Jul 2017 9:39am
This is a deep and very provoking poem
"he sat there
a broken man
and a broken man
has nothing to offer"
Those are some biting lines that really peer into the thoughts of a broken man, the very core of every though pulsing through that you're worthless and at a point of deep sadness it seems you become somewhat worthless with not a thing to offer in the depth of despair, even if temporary. Well written piece.
~anonshadow
"he sat there
a broken man
and a broken man
has nothing to offer"
Those are some biting lines that really peer into the thoughts of a broken man, the very core of every though pulsing through that you're worthless and at a point of deep sadness it seems you become somewhat worthless with not a thing to offer in the depth of despair, even if temporary. Well written piece.
~anonshadow
appreciation
held deep
and close
for a peer's review
is a source of knowledge
of both perspective and
wisdom
a broken man
the poem
intentionally left
for the reader
to take it to the next level
with their imagination
their perspective
their own story
held deep
and close
for a peer's review
is a source of knowledge
of both perspective and
wisdom
a broken man
the poem
intentionally left
for the reader
to take it to the next level
with their imagination
their perspective
their own story
29th Jul 2017 1:15am
When I pictured this poem, I pictured a relatively young soldier who was rendered useless by his PTSD because of the church bell. At this moment he was thinking that he was useless and broken because he can't even handle being a round a church bell, probably one that goes off daily. Good read.
a peer's views
always endearing
appreciation
of the peer
and
his review
both
held closest.
always endearing
appreciation
of the peer
and
his review
both
held closest.
29th Jul 2017 5:37pm
29th Jul 2017 6:59pm
