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Young love
Eyes meet
Hearts pound
Mouths plead
No sounds
Hands touch
My trust
Your lust
Our love
Hearts pound
Mouths plead
No sounds
Hands touch
My trust
Your lust
Our love
Published 30th Jun 2017
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3rd Jul 2017 2:53pm
3rd Jul 2017 7:33pm
Line 4 sounds a bit gramatically awkward. The poem title is very fitting for this poem, and i like how the oxymoron-like lines 3 & 4 can be read as one line, even as the same way as lines 5 & 6 can.
