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poetry that cuts & burns
I hang on to paper
& empty words
by themselves they lie flat
it's the soul & intent
behind the scenes
that give them true grit & power
I want to wield mine
like a switchblade
spit my blood onto the page
make them come alive
mixed with raw courage
& true emotions
I tremble on the inside
as these thoughts bubble
to the surface
do you know how afraid I really am?
yes the cunt who pisses rage
is shaken to the core
unsure of my ability to conquer
my personal daemons
I wear my verses
as I do my war wounds
open to the air
so they can breathe
lest they fester in the dark
may my words become cruel
& slap me around
when confronted with my own truth
let them slash & burn
If I fail to make them a reality
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Re. poetry that cuts & burns
18th Jun 2017 10:28pm
brenda this gave me shivers
you are on a freaking roll lately
loved the hard hitting honesty
xo
you are on a freaking roll lately
loved the hard hitting honesty
xo
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
19th Jun 2017 00:55am
thank you beautiful one for feeling this so deeply.. it just came to me how words need power behind them to mean anything.. I love you.. xo Brenda
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
Anonymous
19th Jun 2017 1:17am
My Beautiful Brenda, I've said it before and I'll say it to my last breath...the day your words aren't wielded upon any page is the day the sun no longer rises...this just proves that with undeniably...
I love you passionately
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
I love you passionately
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
19th Jun 2017 2:01am
thank you my love the day we no longer have anything to write about the sun would have failed to rise on that day..
I love you with all my heart..
xo Brenda
I love you with all my heart..
xo Brenda
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
Anonymous
19th Jun 2017 2:39am
Whoa Crim......this pierced my heart.......I worry with every ink I post if it will touch souls or not........wonder what I've done wrong when readers vanish.......when once friends choose another path of life and go the opposite way as mine......guess it's called life......you precious soul have no worries......your ink touch so many....always have.....even your own blood bleeds upon the page you still live on.......you show your inner strength so many times thru your words.....it makes the rest of look again in the mirror.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
19th Jun 2017 2:46am
thank you graciously lovely Flower your writes shine from within deep inside your soul & resonates in us all beautifully.. you always give me hope dear one thank you :) for the purple love you so delicately rain down on us..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
Anonymous
19th Jun 2017 2:05pm
The irony here is that you compare your words during this challenging growth period to those of your dark edged pieces. And yet it takes so much bravery and honesty to stand in the sunlight, shivering and frightened and bare it all exactly as it is. However you share your experiences, your words, they will be beautiful, my lovely Angel. And I will follow proudly along with you every step of the way. So much love...
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
20th Jun 2017 1:45am
thank you lovely one for embracing the vulnerability in me as well as the hard edges.. I love you.. xo Crim
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
19th Jun 2017 2:55pm
you define your intent, Crim,
it's fierce poetry;
we strive for poetry to light up the night or burn it down...
it's fierce poetry;
we strive for poetry to light up the night or burn it down...
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
20th Jun 2017 1:45am
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
20th Jun 2017 9:13am
Sometimes, when I read something that touches deep,
my words just fall away and all I can manage is a silent...'wow.'
This, Crim, is one of those poems.
I haven't had much time for comments or poetry,
but yours has evolved into something quite amazing while I was away...
my words just fall away and all I can manage is a silent...'wow.'
This, Crim, is one of those poems.
I haven't had much time for comments or poetry,
but yours has evolved into something quite amazing while I was away...
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
thank you Kasai that's one
of the most beautiful comments
i've gotten in ahwile
I deeply appreciate you visits to my pages
love Crim
of the most beautiful comments
i've gotten in ahwile
I deeply appreciate you visits to my pages
love Crim
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
21st Jun 2017 6:37am
Deeply, DEEPLY relatable. Helps to remember that in writing things out it at least solidifies those intentions, although things don't always turn out that way. And sometimes a bit of bloodletting can be very therapeutic. Pissing venomous hate can also be a good way to keep the levels in check. Helps for me, at least. Thanks for the read, and about the long, drawn-out, boring comment that really didn't go anywhere.
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
22nd Jun 2017 5:30pm
thank you Obsessed one for sharing with me your thoughts I agree letting it all out on paper helps quite a bit I deeply appreciate your thoughts my friend & gained insight from you.. love Crim
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
22nd Jun 2017 5:31pm
thank you John so far I'm holding my own had a couple rough days but i'm back to embracing poetry to steady myself.. love Brenda
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
Anonymous
23rd Jun 2017 00:34am
This is truly a poem
that cuts & burns.
Respect & love to my Queen
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
23rd Jun 2017 1:12am
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
23rd Jun 2017 6:27pm
Wow! and Wow! You have no idea how much reading this piece made my heart jump and my mind race bc I know what you are saying..... We have to conquer our demons is right and we can be so tough but facing our own crap we get so scared..... Wanting to write but then what will spill out... Let them slash and burn... I feel freaking empowered damn it lol...... I am loving this...... Yesssssss.
~BSavvy
~BSavvy
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Re: Re. poetry that cuts & burns
25th Jun 2017 10:17pm
thank you Savvy one for such a fantastic response to this write you gave me the biggest smile lady I feel empowered by your comment :) love Crim
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11th Aug 2017 6:20pm
Re. poetry that cuts & burns
Anonymous
24th Jun 2017 3:41am
Brenda.. you are the queen of poetry.. love you..
Dave
Dave
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25th Jun 2017 10:17pm