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the vow
I found myself
in the shattered glass remains
little bits of me
that you snuffed out
like your last cigarette
~
in our burning hours
we fucked with demonic passion
yes I picked myself
out of the small boned china
pieces of my smothered femininity
choked by the corset
you bound me in
~
I was for your amusement
a dalliance nothing more
you whored out my poetry
to draw other women
into your chambers
wanted me to look on
as you gave them the worst of you
~
you didn't see my tears
as they burned
a path down my cheeks
you failed to ever really see me at all
a Sadistic beast
who took pleasure in my pain
~
I washed you away
with the cum & the blood
took back my power
& vowed never again
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 8th Jun 2017
| Edited 9th Jun 2017
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Re. the vow
8th Jun 2017 4:06pm
Wow, such power, the sadness overcomes me but your strength holds me together.
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8th Jun 2017 4:14pm
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8th Jun 2017 5:05pm
This is quite a heavy piece. So dark right up until the lesson learned at the end. Way to finish off a good write with a show of strength. Nice work crim
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8th Jun 2017 5:52pm
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8th Jun 2017 5:57pm
never again is the words. slicin n dicin the punk poetically ma sistah. luv ya take no prsina approach to bastards. a whippin and a lashin.. luv'd it
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8th Jun 2017 6:16pm
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Anonymous
8th Jun 2017 6:03pm
brenda, i find myself facing the potential of this these last few days, the impermanence & the immensity of a darkness that will swallow me into nothingness.
these words are felt bone deep
xo
these words are felt bone deep
xo
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oh my beautiful one I ache for you please see the light that may catch you & keep you from the darkness Katja I love you. you are a pure soul..
love Brenda
love Brenda
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Anonymous
8th Jun 2017 6:33pm
This is fucking heartbreaking, a beautiful write and the second today that makes my heart so heavy.
Ben
Ben
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Re: Re. the vow
8th Jun 2017 6:38pm
thank you dearest Ben it does hurt when your very art gets used to draw other women.. I deeply appreciate your thoughts and the add.. I feel for your heart that you felt the pain of this..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. the vow
8th Jun 2017 7:33pm
i am speechless, my dear. You know how in video games you level up? Well, I believe you are maxed out.
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8th Jun 2017 11:47pm
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Anonymous
8th Jun 2017 8:14pm
There is nothing I can think of to say that hasn't already been said by someone above, but I will add this. Beautiful Angel, you are one of the bravest and most incredibly strong spirits I have ever met. I love that you opened your pain and then took back your power at the end. Go get 'em, beautiful! SO much love...
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Re: Re. the vow
8th Jun 2017 11:48pm
thank you lovely one for such a wonderful comment bringing me smiles :) love Crim
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Anonymous
8th Jun 2017 10:22pm
Strong. Powerful. Adamant ! Stand firm !! Awesome write
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8th Jun 2017 11:49pm
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Anonymous
- Edited 9th Jun 2017 2:13am
9th Jun 2017 00:53am
My Beautiful Brenda...this write absolutely blew me away...each word masterfully coupled....I must echo Lord Hades...maxed indeed! These lines are my favorite...
"yes I picked myself
out of the small boned china
pieces of my smothered femininity
choked by the corset
you bound me in"
I love you madly, deeply my love!
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
"yes I picked myself
out of the small boned china
pieces of my smothered femininity
choked by the corset
you bound me in"
I love you madly, deeply my love!
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
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thank you beautiful one for such a beautiful comment..
I deeply cherish your thoughts & visits.. I love you passionately..
xo Brenda
I deeply cherish your thoughts & visits.. I love you passionately..
xo Brenda
Re. the vow
9th Jun 2017 9:12am
Put me in mind of a pheonix rising from the ashes of what once was. Such pain in your words. But also hope.
Enjoyed
Enjoyed
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10th Jun 2017 11:50am
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11th Jun 2017 7:17pm
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