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A Night of Pleasure
Baby it’s past midnight
I can feel the desire radiate
You are all mine tonight
To fondle to flick to fuck
To touch every crevice untouched
As the night unfolds
Juices of love will dribble down your things
I will drink them like the sweet nectar
You will squirm in pain and pleasure indescribable
Our scents entwined will dance in the air
The sweet venomous intoxication
Will unite us in sweet death
Resting on each other the night shall pass
I can feel the desire radiate
You are all mine tonight
To fondle to flick to fuck
To touch every crevice untouched
As the night unfolds
Juices of love will dribble down your things
I will drink them like the sweet nectar
You will squirm in pain and pleasure indescribable
Our scents entwined will dance in the air
The sweet venomous intoxication
Will unite us in sweet death
Resting on each other the night shall pass
Published 1st Jun 2017
| Edited 10th Jun 2017
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10th Jun 2017 4:24am
Great flow... I especially liked this line:
"Our scents entwined will dance in the air"
IMHO: I think such a sensual poem would benefit from a more subtle title...
"Our scents entwined will dance in the air"
IMHO: I think such a sensual poem would benefit from a more subtle title...
10th Jun 2017 6:10am
Thanks a lot for the Comment! "Our Scents entwined will dance in the air" That's my favourite line too. I am bad with titles I guess :) I changed it but still not happy. Why don't you suggest a good one? :) Thanks!
10th Jun 2017 6:42am
You're welcome! I'm glad I quoted your favorite line :-) I have a thing with titles (lol) and this one is much better! It's difficult to suggest a title, because I like short titles, but I'm not you... I would go for something like "Tonight" or "Mine Tonight" but as I said... it's a good title!
