SHIMMER

somehow it has a Sandburg feel to it;
he would appreciate the park & the birds
& would certainly notice the girls at the pool...

that's a grand compliment John - I often liked the way he'd fall in and out of rhyme like it didn't matter which he was in just as long as u got the tale

dearest Whale I choose the sun today by the light of your poem..

beautiful..

love Brenda

Ah Brenda that delights me

Whale, my Friend....this piece is so uplifting! With your signature, uniquely vivid imagery--both visual, and auditory--your readers are able to share the poet's appreciation of this special time.

Indeed--within the first rays of sun's light, it seems that all glistens with fresh possibilities....and Hope...as in its symbolism of a (spiritual) "rebirth".  I am especially attuned to your concept of Dawn's orchestration....all the ( almost) subtle, perfect blending and balancing : which did occur first.... sunlight awakening the birds to song....the poet's thoughts "willing" the light to shine...or just the opposite....(perhaps...even All interdependent.....and simultaneous....)

Over-all...a most exceptional, and  stirring scribe....that lends wings to my spirit!!

indeed my dear enchanting friend - which comes first the ocean or the notion As I wake now I hear the day beginning - it's all quite remarkable

Beautiful submission, Brother. Poem of the Month worthy.

thank you my sister😊

A touch of the Divine and a bit of the Dark Whale...Poetic to say the least, You wrap emotion and tenderness with such ease...True Masterwork !!!

and thank you my brother - dusk

:-o, Whale! good gosh,..yes a thousand years late but
give me another moment..to re-read dear love

my presence deeply atones for its absence, with sincerity.


Always and always

Im always touched by your presence dear x

this is the part where i hug you because.. well you know that i always admire, adore and  appreciate you for being here, no matter what's going on with me  i hope you feel it, like im feeling this piece!  

the ones above are right, ya know.. this is uplifting and shimmers are a source of enlivening energy    

Thank you my darling whale ;)

...you just brought the sun keep shimmering great soul

Its like the reverse engineering a creator does...reads pretty upbeat with hope..its certainly the words that roll out from hope  n the same hope that shimmers in each n every pain or possibility with a will a call a search a destiny...very deep n insightful as always i find u ...tq so much for sharing this, though am drowing in meloncholic continuum i seem to love;) that's possibly the sun so raging itself to be shone as lukewarm or whatever i believe from ur scribe ...
esp.loved these verses

"Or the scarred and puking lips
At the accident and emergency

Each urge and urgency merges"

Tq again..let the sun shine:)

Love this read Uma "every pain or possibility with a will a call a search a destiny"

Congratulations! This poem has been nominated for Deep Underground Poetry's Featured Poem of the Month Competition for July, '17. You may view the nomination at the link below, and will be notified if selected.  

https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/9685/

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