Setting the day on fire

yep this has power and symbolism a-plenty! Up before they wake up - not a forest fire but Revolution. The moon and crows - the intellectuals and bourgeois- bystanders in a conflict in which they are both victims and collaborators - much here

Thanks  Whale for reading and leaving such a positive comment,very much appreciated.

a lot of covert activity in this,
just deep enough to hide;
nice work...

Thanks John for commenting, really like your work.

baptised with fire, such a strong and inspirational write :-)

Thanks David for reading and commenting, much appreciated.

I agree with my brother Whale about the power and symbolism - especially in reference to the moon and crows.   There's something magnetic about the verse that draws the reader in.  

Disclaimer: Honoring your request for honest critique ( :D ):

"Setting the day on fire"

Firstly, I LOVE the title. Right off the bat it infers seizing the moment!  

I want to burn the dawn,  
Set the creeping mist ablaze,  
Sorch the languid clouds. ( <-- scorch )  
  
Let the evilheaded crows, ( <-- evil-headed )  
Bear witness . ( . <-- ? I can ascertain no reason for this period except emphasis... )  
To the fire, ( ... <-- but then it carries on with 'To' ( which should be Too )  
Melting this sanity.  

Im in to deep!! ( < -- apostrophe I'm )  

The laughing form  
Of a cartoon moon.  
The cliché bird song, ( <--  clichéd  plus I don't think the comma is needed. )  
With their dutiful chorus.  

Im in to deep to let go!!!!  ( <-- I have an aversion to apostrophes as well; however, they're truly needed. :D )  

Eager prolaitaterns; ( <-- proletarians* )
With sad eyes.  
Their hearts , ( <-- I feel like you interrupt the flow of the verse a lot with commas such as this one... )  
A roaring inferno,  
Stare vacantly , ( <-- ...and this one. )  
At a flahing red light. ( <-- flashing/flaring? * )  

They can't see me, ( I'd suggest removing the comma and using a semi-colon. )  
Im in to deep, ( Apostrophes aren't really evil! They just appear to be. )  
Just a light shadow, ( I'd suggest removing the comma and using nothing. )  
Pouring petrol, ( Also suggest removing this comma as well. )  
Upon the stubborn dew.  

Overall I enjoyed the imagery of this. The above mentioned interrupted the flow of setting the day on fire, like a sputtering flame. I wanted to run, jump, be free as the title suggests, but couldn't for fanning that flame that it would continue.  

Nice read definitely indicative of the current atmosphere in politics and the realm of personal morality. It will make a sane person insane very quickly.

Thanks Ahavati for reading and leaving such a detailed critique very much appreciated,
I will make the required changes , Cannot  
disagree with any points you made,
Grammar was never a strong point but no excuses for silly mistakes,
Are you sure apostrophes are not evil?:-) :-) :-)