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JCPTSD
O mystic Jesus, are you blind?
Am I here, Lord;
Incapacitated and terrified to disconnect
From angels of torment and death,
Whilst you shield your eyes from this war within.
O crypto-Christ, are you at peace
With the antichrist, burdened
By the cross idolised by your flock?
Sheep who follow goat tracks to every goddam lie
Memorised from the book of Lucifer;
Unveiled by the sun of self-righteous.
O son of dawn and dusk;
Lord of the first and the end,
Your body ablaze,
Your soul enlightened in the wake of oblivion
Transcends a world erased of religion
Abandoned by pre-judas.
Here I am, Lord.
Can you feel my body burn?
My soul unplugged, absolved of ignorance.
I the Lord, born of flesh and blood.
Written by
case28
(Alexander Case)
Published 2nd May 2017
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Re. JCPTSD
This poem was inspired by the "Pet Goat Analysis Poem" comp hosted by mikimoondancer, which required poets to watch and interpret the epic video "I Pet Goat II", check out the link to the video below:
https://youtu.be/6n_xCI-peq0
https://youtu.be/6n_xCI-peq0
Re. JCPTSD
2nd May 2017 11:23am
One hell of an enlightening write Mr. Case I enjoyed it very much.. multi layered depth with so many possible interpretations..
outstanding..
love Brenda
outstanding..
love Brenda
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7th May 2017 3:24am
The video that inspired the poem was an overwhelming assault to the senses, with so many thoughts floating through my head it was inevitable that this poem would be a bit of an enigma, but hopefully the idea behind the duality of Christ still came through. Thanks heaps for dropping by, Crim.
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Anonymous
2nd May 2017 12:53pm
Wow, bravo I say ..bravo!. . enjoyed this and it's a bit challenging to dive
into as well.
Holie motha m"effer!
Outstanding balance of the unbalanced
into as well.
Holie motha m"effer!
Outstanding balance of the unbalanced
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7th May 2017 3:33am
Hollie motha effer, is one motha effer if a compliment! Thank you for the RL add and for dropping by Splitsunsets.
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2nd May 2017 1:12pm
Fascinating video... I can see how it inspired your poem which I found even more fascinating, also because of the title (I understand what it stands for, but still...) Mysterious, profound and layered write, much enjoyed!
I love that you start with "Am I here" and end with "Here I am" and also that you used the word absolved (it suits the poem)
Great last line... it makes me wonder...
I love that you start with "Am I here" and end with "Here I am" and also that you used the word absolved (it suits the poem)
Great last line... it makes me wonder...
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I'm not religious, but I am intrigued by its history, sacred texts and origins of faith. The idea for the "here I am" and the blind Christ was inspired by a hymn that I find profoundly powerful in its lyrics, which I thought tied in well with my interpretation of the imagery in the video.
I'm stoked you found the poem so intriguing. Thanks heaps for your great comment, Duende.
I'm stoked you found the poem so intriguing. Thanks heaps for your great comment, Duende.
Re. JCPTSD
2nd May 2017 8:27pm
suffering from PTSD this really hit me hard between the nads. You captured some of the thought processes beautifully. A raw and dangerous poem it's worth several reads :-)
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7th May 2017 4:00am
A raw and dangerous poem... I like the sound of that. Thanks heaps for sharing your thoughts and experiences, David. I'm stoked you connected with the poem.
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3rd May 2017 10:41pm
Delving your fingers deep into the goats cooked skull here brother - fantastic write - tail and eyeballs your pen and ink well
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7th May 2017 4:05am
Jeez, whale... you make me sound like the Hannibal Lecter of poetry. I'll take it as a compliment. Thanks heaps for your awesome comment, brother.
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Anonymous
- Edited 9th May 2017 10:18pm
9th May 2017 10:17pm
... ok here comes a thought train.
Lately, I've really been toying with the whole idea of forgiving Jesus. Allegedly, he's supposed to forgive us for everything, but when the shoe is on the other foot - it reconnects us as human beings rather than objects of pre-determined icky sin.
This whole idea was cemented for me in the last stanza that also shone through this raw humanity. And with that, you connect yourself to something that has otherwise been unconnectable. Which really connects your title to your theme.
Long winded explanation, but I loved that toying thought and it's fresh in my mind lately.
I was surprised by this. Not your usual style or voice at all. A thought provoking interlude.
Lately, I've really been toying with the whole idea of forgiving Jesus. Allegedly, he's supposed to forgive us for everything, but when the shoe is on the other foot - it reconnects us as human beings rather than objects of pre-determined icky sin.
This whole idea was cemented for me in the last stanza that also shone through this raw humanity. And with that, you connect yourself to something that has otherwise been unconnectable. Which really connects your title to your theme.
Long winded explanation, but I loved that toying thought and it's fresh in my mind lately.
I was surprised by this. Not your usual style or voice at all. A thought provoking interlude.
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16th May 2017 4:32pm
Wow! Thanks heaps for unloading the thought train on this poem, Missy. Regarding poetry style and voice... I think it's good sometimes to adopt no style, it makes us less predictable. ;)