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Fire-breathing Dragon
I look at my back as I lie on the sheets.
Victoria’s underwear shapes my beets.
Perfect little rocks line my center vain.
Define muscles pull and strain.
I press my arms deep in the bed
Stretch as a cat or goddess instead.
First, I see beauty.
Then, I get petty:
a pimple,
a bump,
a fire-breathing dragon.
Through the pain, I run on.
The endless days of miss meals
my stomach aches and keels.
The heavy loads I carry;
my cramping muscles tarry.
But in this motion
might be perfection.
Victoria’s underwear shapes my beets.
Perfect little rocks line my center vain.
Define muscles pull and strain.
I press my arms deep in the bed
Stretch as a cat or goddess instead.
First, I see beauty.
Then, I get petty:
a pimple,
a bump,
a fire-breathing dragon.
Through the pain, I run on.
The endless days of miss meals
my stomach aches and keels.
The heavy loads I carry;
my cramping muscles tarry.
But in this motion
might be perfection.
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Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
27th Mar 2017 00:06am
I really like what you've done with the structure mid way, stepping the sentences out, and I liked how the first part was more positive as I didn't expect the poem to lead where it did in the end. Welcome to DU. X
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Re: Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
27th Mar 2017 1:12am
Thank you for your comments. it is like my mind went on a tangent and could not go back to happiness.
Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
27th Mar 2017 00:26am
Looked like in my mind's eye nothing less than perfection is all I see :)
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Re: Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
27th Mar 2017 1:13am
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Anonymous
1st Apr 2017 8:05pm
This is a really good poem Domis.
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2nd Apr 2017 10:22am
Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
15th Apr 2017 3:38pm
Nice rhyme and rhythm.... seduction and allure with loads of excitement ... this is a striking piece!! thanks for sharing.
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18th Apr 2017 3:22pm
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Anonymous
9th May 2017 8:17am
You're an endless playground of words and mystery, beautiful combination
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9th May 2017 8:31am
Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
8th Sep 2017 9:42pm
Definitely not what I expected when I saw the title, and still not what I expected after the first lines.. very surprising
but it was a very honest filled write, highly relatible to many..
but it was a very honest filled write, highly relatible to many..
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Re: Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
9th Sep 2017 6:59am
Thank you, I try to write in a way that people are interested in reading the next line but also has an impact on their life.
Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
Outstanding introspection! My favorite kind of poem.
When we look at ourselves
inside and out
seeing transparent imperfections
is the first step in recognizing one's unique beauty
Perfection is an opinion
Everyone can mold in their hands with artistry
As poets we spill words
to paint in inks of many shades and shadows
One can view it as darkening the page with impurities
while another sees a sunrise for tomorrow's morning...
be your artistry
When we look at ourselves
inside and out
seeing transparent imperfections
is the first step in recognizing one's unique beauty
Perfection is an opinion
Everyone can mold in their hands with artistry
As poets we spill words
to paint in inks of many shades and shadows
One can view it as darkening the page with impurities
while another sees a sunrise for tomorrow's morning...
be your artistry
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22nd Sep 2017 3:26am
this poem has to do with my struggles with anorexia. It takes all my might to see the beautiful in me. I must see that who I am is already a masterpiece and does not need 20 more drafts
Re: Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
22nd Sep 2017 6:36am
Sometimes an old saying gets repeated over and over, even though it is completely wrong. True beauty is not skin deep, it begins within. The superficial only touches the eyes which cannot feel the way the heart feels. Poetry comes from the heart and I can see that without ever having met you, you are beautiful. Anyone who inspires me to write a poem is beautiful in my eyes and you did it to me twice in an hour. :) JJ
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Re: Re. Fire-breathing Dragon
22nd Sep 2017 7:24am
The key with beauty is looking at the side that you like and reducing focus on the sides you don't like. for all of us has ugly parts of out either physical or mental but most people also have beautiful parts to them as well.