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Taking Care of Yourself
Learn to love all the parts of yourself
Because even your mind, body and spirit are
Important. It is like living on the high shelf
Where others cannot reach. You live like a star,
Burning strong and brightly forever
In the sky. You should try
To not burn for those who will never
In their lifetime be the ones to cry
Over you. Just like you reserve
Your heart for the right one,
Save your tears for the ones who will deserve
And earn them. Appreciate your own sun
And see the beauty in your smile.
Your love and strength are strong.
Do not let anyone dim it all. Every mile
May be distant and really long
To walk alone, but it is all
Only yours. Sometimes you
Cannot help but hurt yourself and fall.
You have to continue on and to always be true.
Because even your mind, body and spirit are
Important. It is like living on the high shelf
Where others cannot reach. You live like a star,
Burning strong and brightly forever
In the sky. You should try
To not burn for those who will never
In their lifetime be the ones to cry
Over you. Just like you reserve
Your heart for the right one,
Save your tears for the ones who will deserve
And earn them. Appreciate your own sun
And see the beauty in your smile.
Your love and strength are strong.
Do not let anyone dim it all. Every mile
May be distant and really long
To walk alone, but it is all
Only yours. Sometimes you
Cannot help but hurt yourself and fall.
You have to continue on and to always be true.
Published 18th Mar 2017
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18th Mar 2017 12:11pm
This is such an endearing piece, E. I truly enjoyed the message. It's like passing wisdom down to the next generation.
I struggled with this stanza and would suggest a bit if a revision.
You should try
To not burn for those who will never
In their lifetime be the ones to cry
Over you.
Perhaps something like
You should not
Burn for those who will never
Cry over you in their lifetime
I only suggest because I really enjoyed this and wanted it to flow smoothly.
I struggled with this stanza and would suggest a bit if a revision.
You should try
To not burn for those who will never
In their lifetime be the ones to cry
Over you.
Perhaps something like
You should not
Burn for those who will never
Cry over you in their lifetime
I only suggest because I really enjoyed this and wanted it to flow smoothly.
19th Mar 2017 5:31am
Thank you (especially for the suggestion to making it better). I really appreciate it.
