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Why don't you understand?
As i slide the razor across my arms
I think why me? why must I feel this way
I never did anything to feel this way
There's always been something wrong with me
But no one can ever figure out why
I cry endlessly every night wondering..
Wondering why I'm like this
No one ever no's why I'm depressed
They say I'm faking it
Wanting attention
Ha
Would i really go this far for attention?
I like people not noticing me
Cause when they do hurtful things escape there mouth
So call me an attention whore
I don't care anymore
Just leave me alone
Let me die in peace
Just let me be happy for once
The silence of death is my only escape
You don't have to understand anymore
Just leave
I think why me? why must I feel this way
I never did anything to feel this way
There's always been something wrong with me
But no one can ever figure out why
I cry endlessly every night wondering..
Wondering why I'm like this
No one ever no's why I'm depressed
They say I'm faking it
Wanting attention
Ha
Would i really go this far for attention?
I like people not noticing me
Cause when they do hurtful things escape there mouth
So call me an attention whore
I don't care anymore
Just leave me alone
Let me die in peace
Just let me be happy for once
The silence of death is my only escape
You don't have to understand anymore
Just leave
Published 18th Aug 2011
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18th Aug 2011 9:23am
i would say that this probably belongs in the 'non-fiction prose' section, in which case, it would be only a typo or two that should be fixed, like some capital 'I's (or just make them all small) and "no's" should be 'knows'.
if you want to make this a poem, my suggestion would be to be a little less lengthy and hollow. go line by line and use some representation for what you want to say instead of writing a diary entry, try to gather a rhythm. here's a very basic example of what i mean:
I wonder
as the blade brings
my beloved roses
deep red, to bloom
on this thin skin
No one knows why
... etc.
it's really not my choice of subject, which is why i'm exceedingly crap at it myself, but i see nothing wrong with it if you place it in the non-fiction prose. good luck. [:
if you want to make this a poem, my suggestion would be to be a little less lengthy and hollow. go line by line and use some representation for what you want to say instead of writing a diary entry, try to gather a rhythm. here's a very basic example of what i mean:
I wonder
as the blade brings
my beloved roses
deep red, to bloom
on this thin skin
No one knows why
... etc.
it's really not my choice of subject, which is why i'm exceedingly crap at it myself, but i see nothing wrong with it if you place it in the non-fiction prose. good luck. [:
22nd Aug 2011 11:12pm
