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Weeping woman
My heart is an anchor.
It weighs heavily beneath a sea of tears.
I cling to it desperately as the tide tries
to rip my trembling hands from the weathered
line that holds me in place.
When I feel it washing over me I confine myself
to dark places so no one can see
my desolation, or pity my sadness.
I've learned that sadness holds no pity
for a weeping woman, only sorrow.
I cry alone and love cannot save my
tender skin from the brackish sting of dolor.
Perhaps one day the line will grow weak
and I will drift away, small and forgotten
as the current carries me to you.
It weighs heavily beneath a sea of tears.
I cling to it desperately as the tide tries
to rip my trembling hands from the weathered
line that holds me in place.
When I feel it washing over me I confine myself
to dark places so no one can see
my desolation, or pity my sadness.
I've learned that sadness holds no pity
for a weeping woman, only sorrow.
I cry alone and love cannot save my
tender skin from the brackish sting of dolor.
Perhaps one day the line will grow weak
and I will drift away, small and forgotten
as the current carries me to you.
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Re. Weeping woman
30th Jan 2017 12:24pm
A crushin' ache felt as I read this...
With an endin' that felt wistful yet bittersweet...
With an endin' that felt wistful yet bittersweet...
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30th Jan 2017 9:48pm
Re. Weeping woman
30th Jan 2017 1:13pm
the current flows in one direction,
I'll be on the dock watching;
I feel the sea breeze, Kas...
I'll be on the dock watching;
I feel the sea breeze, Kas...
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one day it will take me there, John;
the salt on my cheeks returned to the sea
and my tears dried by a gentle breeze...
the salt on my cheeks returned to the sea
and my tears dried by a gentle breeze...
Re. Weeping woman
30th Jan 2017 1:56pm
There it is again...that sense of smallness when we feel lost and forlorn. We are never so small we can't be found, I think. Beautifully tender and sad, Kasai
Willow
Willow
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Ah yes, that overwhelming feeling of small that makes us realize what a vast place we live in. Sometimes it's an effort to
pull ourselves back from that place.
Thank you, sweet Willow, for drifting with me...
pull ourselves back from that place.
Thank you, sweet Willow, for drifting with me...
Re. Weeping woman
30th Jan 2017 4:17pm
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30th Jan 2017 9:42pm
The translation of words to emotion, it weighs heavy. Thank you for the kind comment...
Re. Weeping woman
30th Jan 2017 6:38pm
beautiful Kasai I feel you deep sadness in this write.. the giving in at the end is so very poignant..
love Crim
love Crim
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30th Jan 2017 9:46pm
Thank you for sharing in my sadness, talented lady. Sometimes we have to give in, I think, embrace our sadness and move on...
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Anonymous
30th Jan 2017 9:58pm
Sweet Kasai...such a poignant write placed before us as you often do...for what I thought me alone, embracing the sadness and feeling it shows that something mattered...when you don't need to do such a thing, then it wasn't all it was thought or felt to be...one can still move forward while reflecting as they continue to feel...such a sad place it would be if we didn't...."Feel"...
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
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31st Jan 2017 8:11am
So very true, Taryn, so very true. Those things that make us feel, that bring our emoitions to the surface, were well worth the experience. Much like poetry, I suppose. To embrace it, to keep it close, is just as it should be. Thank you, sweet, sweet lady, for 'feeling' my words...
Re. Weeping woman
31st Jan 2017 3:39am
Oh Kasai, how I feel your words... this write brought me to tears!
I kept rereading it, especially the ending... it's painful in a beautiful way...
I kept rereading it, especially the ending... it's painful in a beautiful way...
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31st Jan 2017 8:17am
I've learned how beautiful tears can be, so I write them in a poem, I embrace them. I am so flattered by the reread and RL, it means a lot to me. Thank you, Duende, for sharing a few tears...
Re. Weeping woman
31st Jan 2017 9:01am
This has very nice and delicate wording especially the ending, the rhythm does seem to mimic the ebb and flow of a tide.....
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1st Feb 2017 8:11am
Thanks for the great comment, PR, perhaps all poetry has its own unique ebb and flow. Inspiration flows with the tide...
Re. Weeping woman
31st Jan 2017 4:03pm
Moments like these are so difficult - but everyone faces them. The difference you've demonstrated here, Kasai, is that you turn within the darkness of yourself for comfort and survival in the hope of one day. Each day is a current filled with mystery and magic; one day it will be all yours.
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1st Feb 2017 8:24am
Leaving me with another amazing comment, Ahavati, I do so enjoy them. I find strength in my sadness, embrace it in the hopes that it may keep me above water so the tide can take me where I long to be. Perhaps one day I'll find my safe harbor. Thank you for seeing beneath the words, kind lady, your lovely words mean much...
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Anonymous
1st Feb 2017 3:11am
Achingly beautiful. Every word is felt so deeply.
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1st Feb 2017 8:26am
Thanks so much, your RL and kind words are appreciated. Glad you enjoyed the visit...
Re. Weeping woman
2nd Feb 2017 3:46am
This is beautifully written. I saw that you posted this for one of the competitions. It is all such a hard emotion and topic to write about, but you did such a wonderful job with this one. I can feel the ache and pain. Kasai, you have such a way with words. Wow and bravo, my dear!!
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2nd Feb 2017 8:39am
I've been trying to enter competitions more, for some reason it's a little outside my comfort zone, but I'm working on it. It is a hard subject and I think maybe some of us have a predisposition to these things. Thanks for coming to visit and such a great comment, eswaller, good to see you on my pages...
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3rd Feb 2017 4:38am
I'm glad that you are stepping outside of your comfort zone Kasai. We all have different perspectives, but we go through some of the same things. I have been enjoying your work so much. I hope that you keep it up. And thanks for looking at my work as well. Many hugs, my dear.
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3rd Feb 2017 10:06am
That's so sweet of you, eswaller, I guess a lot of us come here for similar reasons, and we do have many different perspectives. It's nice to read so many different styles and watch them grow and change as they develop. I've enjoyed watching you hone your skills, each one better than the last. Thanks for the lovely words and hugs, kind lady...
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Anonymous
3rd Feb 2017 00:04am
What a gorgeous and tender write, it took me awhile to find this, my apologies Kasai but i'm so glad i finally did. I can't add anything more to already wonderful observations by the other commentators except to say every line is something every woman wishes they had written it themselves.
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3rd Feb 2017 10:14am
Thanks so much, Vee, I'm glad you came to visit and share such an amazing comment with me. I truly appreciate it. Flattered by your generous words and I really enjoy your work, by the way. No apologies needed, the wonderful words you've left me are more than enough...