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Asunder
As you spoke I felt your words
Delving into my core
Grasping, clutching
Freezing my heart
Shatters
As you spoke I felt your words
Like a hurricane
Ripping my soul asunder
the waves crashing over
Dragging me down to darkest depths
As you spoke
the world went silent
Lulling me to dreamless sleep
I felt your words
As I went numb
This is the end.
Delving into my core
Grasping, clutching
Freezing my heart
Shatters
As you spoke I felt your words
Like a hurricane
Ripping my soul asunder
the waves crashing over
Dragging me down to darkest depths
As you spoke
the world went silent
Lulling me to dreamless sleep
I felt your words
As I went numb
This is the end.
Published 27th Nov 2016
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Lovely write. And when a woman says it's over, it almost always is...
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30th Nov 2016 2:54am
Thank you! I can't speak for all women, but once ive given up on a relationship, I'll never go back.
28th Nov 2016 1:03pm
30th Nov 2016 2:57am
Many thanks Jen. Much appreciated the read, the comment, and for adding to your reading list.
8th Jun 2017 5:04am
You take break up poetry to a new height. Your ending was an emotional powerhouse. Girl you got it going.
Hugs,
John
Hugs,
John
9th Jul 2019 11:21pm
