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Navigating Neptune... [ co write with AEMelia564 ]
In the arms of the Caspian sea
Seven stars ago, beneath all tides
I heard you call my name
Levitating sounds of starlight falling over a lone night at sea
These cobblestones are engraved with lost words
Sunken ships would set sail to Atlantis, land of my crown
The salt upon my lips always invokes a feeling of belonging
Silence hung low in deep evening red where clouds
journeyed above me, In the dark maze I held on to Neptune`s fork
as it would grant me the veil of his dreams
The smell of the dry soil piercing through the rich thick fog
From the hills and over the meadows lays a mystic cloud
Half-decayed bones pointing the fingers towards the ocean
The breeze makes my throat dry and craves for the salt on your lips
Chimes of the Bridal Chorus chanted harmonized with the wind
I'm here at the shore before the lost souls behind me
Waiting for you to come to me dressed in the darkness
Blemished by the corals behind my eyes ; you hear the searching songs
Of sirens within these waters, as horizons watch us, dolphins are dancing
I bring you sea horses, I lull the half light and find your footprints
Through these waves of sacred foam, your feet are sinking in this soil
Deeper, as my spirit, clutches to your searching hand
Sparkles of the pearls on your neck are shamed by the blueness of your eyes
My gaze wandered an eternity through the horizon to anchor in yours
My footprints faded in the waves, but you… only you found it
You draw me from my miseries, closer to the warmth of your breath
Melting the cold heart and leaving my vulnerability to you
Sun strokes my eyes, caressed by this spiraling light
Blossom of fume rekindles veiled before us
Sea Wolf howls to a symphony of flames
Dark realms will be flooded with the passion of the night
Let us bring a new horizon to these forgotten shores
Let me be the one entangle seaweed kisses upon your shoulders...
Every morning... From tomorrow... To an infinity...
Published 27th Nov 2016
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27th Nov 2016 6:16pm
Enchanted by lucid imagery.
Unquestionably taking notes.
Many thanks for this powerful story!
Unquestionably taking notes.
Many thanks for this powerful story!
28th Nov 2016 6:17am
28th Nov 2016 4:17am
This is such an enchanting poem, love it!
I had to reread it as soon as I saw what it was about (and who wrote what) and you made this ancient tale so magical (it could easily have been entered in the "The magic of merfolks" competition)
What I really like is how you complement each other and a great example is this:
"The salt upon my lips always invokes a feeling of belonging"
"The breeze makes my throat dry and craves for the salt on your lips" > lines like these create unity!
The imagery in this one is stunning as well:
"I'm here at the shore before the lost souls behind me
Waiting for you to come to me dressed in the Darkness" > that might be my favorite line!
"Blemished by the corals behind my eyes ; you hear the searching songs
Of sirens within these waters, as horizons watch us, dolphins are dancing" > I so love the idea of dancing dolphins!
There are so many beautiful lines, but I wanted to highlight a few!
The last line is just breathtakingly beautiful!!!
Excellent write, thoroughly enjoyed!
I had to reread it as soon as I saw what it was about (and who wrote what) and you made this ancient tale so magical (it could easily have been entered in the "The magic of merfolks" competition)
What I really like is how you complement each other and a great example is this:
"The salt upon my lips always invokes a feeling of belonging"
"The breeze makes my throat dry and craves for the salt on your lips" > lines like these create unity!
The imagery in this one is stunning as well:
"I'm here at the shore before the lost souls behind me
Waiting for you to come to me dressed in the Darkness" > that might be my favorite line!
"Blemished by the corals behind my eyes ; you hear the searching songs
Of sirens within these waters, as horizons watch us, dolphins are dancing" > I so love the idea of dancing dolphins!
There are so many beautiful lines, but I wanted to highlight a few!
The last line is just breathtakingly beautiful!!!
Excellent write, thoroughly enjoyed!
28th Nov 2016 6:18am
Thank you so much.. :)
Iam so happy to see you enjoyed the poem :)
you comments are very constructive :)
Iam so happy to see you enjoyed the poem :)
you comments are very constructive :)
29th Nov 2016 2:02pm
Thank you for mentioning my comments are constructive!
I really appreciate that!
I really appreciate that!
