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Such Opportunities
She's spending hours knowing that the care
And usage that she's put to won't relent,
Until she's rather wetter than she'd dare
To imagine - she'll let it represent
The hopes that she's aspired to - the use
That she'll experience means pussy lips
Are traced and pinched and eagerly prepared,
As fingers stroke and circle and her clit's
Excited and aroused - she won't be spared
A moment of enticement - let the bite
Of bamboo cane on nipples heat her breast;
The leather gag feels snug and tastes quite right
She knows that these contentions never rest;
They keep her wide awake, keen to preserve
Such opportunities: when she'll just serve.
And usage that she's put to won't relent,
Until she's rather wetter than she'd dare
To imagine - she'll let it represent
The hopes that she's aspired to - the use
That she'll experience means pussy lips
Are traced and pinched and eagerly prepared,
As fingers stroke and circle and her clit's
Excited and aroused - she won't be spared
A moment of enticement - let the bite
Of bamboo cane on nipples heat her breast;
The leather gag feels snug and tastes quite right
She knows that these contentions never rest;
They keep her wide awake, keen to preserve
Such opportunities: when she'll just serve.
Published 27th Nov 2016
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27th Nov 2016 7:39pm
I liked this poem a lot more than I thought I might; I'm normally wary of erotic poems, especially those with extreme-content warnings, only because I find that I'm normally in for several pages of eye-watering nonsense in which the author seems to be ticking off all the naughty words they know.
This, however, was a good piece of craftsmanship; teasing, gentle, seductive, menacing, a violent promise here, a tickle there. The power play, Dominant/submissive element is surprisingly subtle, coming about through the images and the implications of words like "serve", as opposed to the author just saying "she's ma slut slave gimme yo' pusseh" (as you might be able to tell, I'm not fond of a lot of erotic poetry that I've read!).
Thank you for the read, this was fun and, well, erotic. It reminds me of the difference between the erotic and the perverse: the erotic is when you use a duck feather to tickle and tease your partner. The perverse is when you use the WHOLE duck.
This, however, was a good piece of craftsmanship; teasing, gentle, seductive, menacing, a violent promise here, a tickle there. The power play, Dominant/submissive element is surprisingly subtle, coming about through the images and the implications of words like "serve", as opposed to the author just saying "she's ma slut slave gimme yo' pusseh" (as you might be able to tell, I'm not fond of a lot of erotic poetry that I've read!).
Thank you for the read, this was fun and, well, erotic. It reminds me of the difference between the erotic and the perverse: the erotic is when you use a duck feather to tickle and tease your partner. The perverse is when you use the WHOLE duck.
28th Nov 2016 6:56pm
This is the most thoughtful comment I have ever had - thank you for taking the time to express your views. I agree erotic and adult tends to encourage potty mouth if only for effect; but there is no reason why one can't be sensual while largely avoiding foul language - the softer side of D/s deserves more than invective perhaps.
