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Take me away...
Take me away,
To a quiet place,
Where I can rest in peace,
And admit defeat with grace.
Bring me close to you,
Into a soft embrace,
So I can kiss you softly,
Before tears form my face.
Hide me away from others,
They do not wish to see me now,
I will not be returning,
This my solum vowel.
I can't change what you've done,
With your decision made,
And now I end this,
But what a game we played.
Visit me from time to time,
Now that I am gone,
Remember all the memories,
That made two halves one.
To a quiet place,
Where I can rest in peace,
And admit defeat with grace.
Bring me close to you,
Into a soft embrace,
So I can kiss you softly,
Before tears form my face.
Hide me away from others,
They do not wish to see me now,
I will not be returning,
This my solum vowel.
I can't change what you've done,
With your decision made,
And now I end this,
But what a game we played.
Visit me from time to time,
Now that I am gone,
Remember all the memories,
That made two halves one.
Published 7th Aug 2011
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11th Aug 2011 8:11am
I notice that you get a lot of reads on your erotic poetry... but not on these kind. A lot of what you say is very cliche and has been heard before. You should come up with a creative way to write things.
Writing about sex is easy... all you have to do is tell about your experience. Creativity isn't really needed.
Writing about sex is easy... all you have to do is tell about your experience. Creativity isn't really needed.
11th Aug 2011 9:16am
I think most of these poems get plenty of reads, and I take you opinion into account but I write how I write, is the joy of freedom of speech and my simplistic approach of getting my message across is mostly appreciated.
