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Anathema
Immured within repetition.
Blood-thirsty for the competition.
Altered strategic positions.
Still without acquisition.
I won’t capitulate,
However, mortality reminds me,
That at this rate,
My failures may be my fate.
Which stones are unturned?
Which bridges shouldn’t I have burned?
Which lessons have I not learned?
Where to strengthen my search?
So many questions, so many dilemmas.
So close, yet so far away.
Was I meant to be treated as an anathema?
So much left on the agenda…
But such mind-shattering evisceration,
Can’t much longer, be tolerated.
Such stains on my soul stretched, starved and separated.
Suffering such saturnine states of sullen segregation.
Will nothing but death acquiesce?
Blood-thirsty for the competition.
Altered strategic positions.
Still without acquisition.
I won’t capitulate,
However, mortality reminds me,
That at this rate,
My failures may be my fate.
Which stones are unturned?
Which bridges shouldn’t I have burned?
Which lessons have I not learned?
Where to strengthen my search?
So many questions, so many dilemmas.
So close, yet so far away.
Was I meant to be treated as an anathema?
So much left on the agenda…
But such mind-shattering evisceration,
Can’t much longer, be tolerated.
Such stains on my soul stretched, starved and separated.
Suffering such saturnine states of sullen segregation.
Will nothing but death acquiesce?
Published 20th Nov 2016
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20th Nov 2016 9:05am
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20th Nov 2016 5:18pm
What a heart-warming compliment. Wow! Thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed this. May our words fuel the fire for success AEMelia!
20th Nov 2016 1:24pm
How to comment on a masterpiece like this?
The phrasing and the alliteration is stunning as usual... bravo!
The phrasing and the alliteration is stunning as usual... bravo!
20th Nov 2016 5:20pm
Thank you so much, Duende! I kicked it up a notch near the end there. Thought that might add a little strength to the cessation.
20th Nov 2016 1:41pm
First of all, this is brilliantly articulated and executed. I don't know if I have any of the answers...actually, I'm sure I don't. But as long as we never stop seeking them, we learn, we grow. And who's to say death isn't just another beginning? I love this piece.
Willow
Willow
20th Nov 2016 5:22pm
Not having the answers will always be the case, but such will always keep us blood-thirsty for success!! Thanks for the read and feedback Willow!
20th Nov 2016 5:34pm
Digging the inner journey CW...
The depth profound insight ..the fluid wordplay
The exquisite verbiage. ...
A poetic gem masterfully presented. .
The depth profound insight ..the fluid wordplay
The exquisite verbiage. ...
A poetic gem masterfully presented. .
20th Nov 2016 5:40pm
Man! it's refreshing to wake up to such positive feedback for this one. I whipped it up quick before I passed out last night, and wasn't sure what I thought of it. Much appreciated, Naajir!
20th Nov 2016 9:20pm
Clever wordplay,unanswered questions, mortaltiy and new begginings within an end.
Nicely done
Nicely done
20th Nov 2016 9:30pm
29th Nov 2016 5:41am
You are a convolution, a compilation of life,
and I enjoy how you let us see your bits
and pieces.
wow, just wow
-Howlings
and I enjoy how you let us see your bits
and pieces.
wow, just wow
-Howlings
29th Nov 2016 6:46am
Thank you so much!! Glad you're enjoying my work. There's always a glimpse into my soul, some obvious, some, not so much! I love sharing! Love the feedback! But, perhaps most of all, the feeling of comradery here is the greatest benefit of all! Thanks again Howlingwhelms!
