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Embrace my loneliness
My itinerant heart is lost and in my somnolent journey I have walked along a barren road. It is a lonely, broken bed of concrete that jilts my spine with every senseless step and seeps through the soles of my shoes to cradle my saddness like a familiar companion. In some psychotic way, my escort, the loneliness, keeps me from being alone.
I saw beauty in all things peculiar, things that were never meant to be labeled as kind or pretty. Hidden rainbows painted within in the alcoves of the most violent storm demand that I take pleasure in their splendor, and the brilliance of an illuminated moon embellished my wayward path on the blackest of nights. Beautiful, is my burden and my pockets are replete with polished stones.
With a heavy heart, I walk along my via dolorosa, leaving a trail of tears behind me for a love I cannot find, cannot reach. I keep my head down while the graceless winds batter my curls and sting my tender face, but when the scent of you fills my head, I close my eyes, I dream of home.
Home is where the heart is - I gave my heart to you.
I saw beauty in all things peculiar, things that were never meant to be labeled as kind or pretty. Hidden rainbows painted within in the alcoves of the most violent storm demand that I take pleasure in their splendor, and the brilliance of an illuminated moon embellished my wayward path on the blackest of nights. Beautiful, is my burden and my pockets are replete with polished stones.
With a heavy heart, I walk along my via dolorosa, leaving a trail of tears behind me for a love I cannot find, cannot reach. I keep my head down while the graceless winds batter my curls and sting my tender face, but when the scent of you fills my head, I close my eyes, I dream of home.
Home is where the heart is - I gave my heart to you.
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Re. Embrace my loneliness
16th Nov 2016 1:36pm
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Thank you, John, always sweet in your beautiful comments.
It means alot coming from such a talented poet...
It means alot coming from such a talented poet...
Re. Embrace my loneliness
16th Nov 2016 4:41pm
As always I feel you, Kasai!
You are so talented in laying bare your feelings... your emotions...
You are so talented in laying bare your feelings... your emotions...
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16th Nov 2016 10:56pm
So kind of you, Duende, always glad to see you stop in,
Thank you for feeling my words...
Thank you for feeling my words...
Re. Embrace my loneliness
16th Nov 2016 5:06pm
Beautiful, Kasai. I particularly enjoyed the language in this, e.g. - itinerant heart, somnolent journey, and also the alliteration throughout the piece, i.e. - broken bed of concrete. It's riddled with pain, doubt, and uncertainty that's palpable to the reader.
Via Dolorosa is a very difficult road to travel, but there is relief when it's over if you just keep going.
Via Dolorosa is a very difficult road to travel, but there is relief when it's over if you just keep going.
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Re: Re. Embrace my loneliness
16th Nov 2016 11:03pm
Thank you so much, Ahavati, your comments are truly wonderful and so in depth. I'm always flattered that you take the time to share your amazing insights with me, such a wise and talented poetess you are.
My Via Dolorosa will end one day, as all journeys must ultimately come to an end...
My Via Dolorosa will end one day, as all journeys must ultimately come to an end...
Re. Embrace my loneliness
16th Nov 2016 8:07pm
This is a beautiful piece and I connect with it on so many levels. It is like you are bearing a huge part of your soul. Thanks for sharing such a personal and Rae piece.
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16th Nov 2016 11:06pm
That means a lot to me, my soul layed bare, quite true. I'm glad I could share it with you, and I thank you for the lovely comment. So happy you felt it...
Re. Embrace my loneliness
17th Nov 2016 1:57am
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17th Nov 2016 6:08am
Re. Embrace my loneliness
17th Nov 2016 1:59am
Seems so deey unfair for there to be so many wantin, n wanton souls with no one to give them what they want n need... Truly, a
heartfelt spill...
heartfelt spill...
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17th Nov 2016 6:27am
It is unfair, and to love someone, too far away to reach is equally so. It makes the journey long, but love drives us forward, because to lose it would be much worse.
Thanks for kind words...
Thanks for kind words...
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17th Nov 2016 7:56am
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Re: Re. Embrace my loneliness
17th Nov 2016 8:55am
What a lovely comment, AEMelia, such a great compliment.
Thank you for reading me.
Sometimes loneliness is a close friend, and we keep it, just that way, in hopes of something less melancholy one day...
Thank you for reading me.
Sometimes loneliness is a close friend, and we keep it, just that way, in hopes of something less melancholy one day...
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I love the second paragraph; it sounds great read aloud and I don't feel it's too wordy, but just right and the whole thing shows writing skill....
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Re: Re. Embrace my loneliness
17th Nov 2016 11:40pm
Really appreciate the comment and the fact that you read it aloud, I rarely read my own that way and its nice to get some input from other poets. I'm always trying to improve on things and to know my skills are improving is so great.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts...
Thanks for sharing your thoughts...
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17th Nov 2016 11:42pm
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Anonymous
18th Nov 2016 3:06am
Kasai, you truly have taken breath from me here....the second passage screams of your beauty with such a delicate whisper...there will be a day (I am sure of it) when someone worthy will see your trail of tears, pick them up and view them as multi faceted diamonds and cradle you forever....this was lovely in it's vulnerability and ache...
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. Embrace my loneliness
18th Nov 2016 6:17am
That was one of the most beautiful comments I have ever heard,Taryn, truly it was. I am thrilled to see you in my comments section.
Thank you so much for the hopeful words and smiles, they mean alot...
Thank you so much for the hopeful words and smiles, they mean alot...
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Anonymous
- Edited 19th Nov 2016 9:46pm
19th Nov 2016 6:48pm
A soul lay bare...and it is felt.
I love this beautiful vulnerable write. Words which resonate so deeply.
The last line...wraps this up with a beautiful bow.
I adore this piece 💓
I love this beautiful vulnerable write. Words which resonate so deeply.
The last line...wraps this up with a beautiful bow.
I adore this piece 💓
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Re: Re. Embrace my loneliness
19th Nov 2016 9:36pm
Thank you so much for feeling my words, it means a lot and the RL was quite flattering as well. I be sure to wander your direction....
Re. Embrace my loneliness
29th Nov 2016 6:10am
My Dearest Ink Mistress,
First I must tell you how this
truly spoke me in may aspects
which are conceived in different
areas of life..
You are so brilliantly beautiful
for this one, woo, fanning my
eyes over here... .nevermind
me..
just catching my breaths ;)
Lovely
-Howlings
First I must tell you how this
truly spoke me in may aspects
which are conceived in different
areas of life..
You are so brilliantly beautiful
for this one, woo, fanning my
eyes over here... .nevermind
me..
just catching my breaths ;)
Lovely
-Howlings
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Re: Re. Embrace my loneliness
29th Nov 2016 11:56am
That means a lot ,Howlings, more than you know. Such amazing words you leave on my pages.
Thank you, sweet lady, for making me smile in my loneliness...
Thank you, sweet lady, for making me smile in my loneliness...