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Sens mon amour
"The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched. They must be felt with the heart." - Helen Keller
I found solace in a place where only anguish dwelt, worshipped a harvest moon in the stygian blackness of a cloudless sky, and resented the birth of a painted sunrise with the broken light of every dawn. I found forbidden beauty in a place where beauty was not meant to be, and it filled me.
I rode a desolate, westerly wind that carried only the verbena scent of my tears as it made its fated journey, leaving the treetops weeping and exposed, carving the peaks of mountain ranges and desperately seeking the warmth of your touch. Not with my hands, but with my heart.
It is the sweeping wind that carries my tears (crystalettes damp with love) past the scowling trees that would tangle us in their green hair, beyond the mountains that rise like Shakespeare's cloud-capp'd towers, to find fury in your arms & the burning of our kisses.
Let not the angels nor devils on dark horses nor even poetry hold back the love-in-lust that bequeaths my naked desire to my solitary Soldier ( only to you), as I hold your heart in mine.
I hold your heart in mine...
I found solace in a place where only anguish dwelt, worshipped a harvest moon in the stygian blackness of a cloudless sky, and resented the birth of a painted sunrise with the broken light of every dawn. I found forbidden beauty in a place where beauty was not meant to be, and it filled me.
I rode a desolate, westerly wind that carried only the verbena scent of my tears as it made its fated journey, leaving the treetops weeping and exposed, carving the peaks of mountain ranges and desperately seeking the warmth of your touch. Not with my hands, but with my heart.
It is the sweeping wind that carries my tears (crystalettes damp with love) past the scowling trees that would tangle us in their green hair, beyond the mountains that rise like Shakespeare's cloud-capp'd towers, to find fury in your arms & the burning of our kisses.
Let not the angels nor devils on dark horses nor even poetry hold back the love-in-lust that bequeaths my naked desire to my solitary Soldier ( only to you), as I hold your heart in mine.
I hold your heart in mine...
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Re. Sens mon amour
8th Nov 2016 12:25pm
the wind, the tears, the love ,the poem -
& how we get tangled in our lustful desire;
it's all of those things, Kas.
carried in the heart, as Cummings directed...
& how we get tangled in our lustful desire;
it's all of those things, Kas.
carried in the heart, as Cummings directed...
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Re: Re. Sens mon amour
8th Nov 2016 12:36pm
Thank you, John, those beautiful comments of yours mean a lot to me, just wouldn't be the same without them.
I think Cummings defined its very essence, all of those wonderful things held close, in our hearts...
I think Cummings defined its very essence, all of those wonderful things held close, in our hearts...
Re. Sens mon amour
8th Nov 2016 1:56pm
You've created such a beautifully rich portrait here, brought nature to life so strongly that I could see and smell it all. And the longing in this is palpable. Such a beautiful soul you have, Kasai...
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Re: Re. Sens mon amour
8th Nov 2016 6:00pm
All that longing, seen, felt, and heard in everything around us, how could it not be inspiring?
And that comment, a beautiful soul, really touched me. Thank you, sweet Willow.
I think mabybe, every poet has a beautiful soul, it shows in our poetry...
And that comment, a beautiful soul, really touched me. Thank you, sweet Willow.
I think mabybe, every poet has a beautiful soul, it shows in our poetry...
Re. Sens mon amour
Anonymous
8th Nov 2016 1:56pm
Honey, omy, im so stuck
I need a hug after reading this,
I'm going to find me some arms ,
lol no, I am serious..my yearning
feels louder than ever
Thanks a lot gorgeous, how cruelly beautiful
I need a hug after reading this,
I'm going to find me some arms ,
lol no, I am serious..my yearning
feels louder than ever
Thanks a lot gorgeous, how cruelly beautiful
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Re: Re. Sens mon amour
8th Nov 2016 6:15pm
Such a kind lady, if only I could reach you, I would hug you myself.
Your wonderful words mean a great deal to me,
Thank you for sharing them and for feeling my own.
All that yearning needs someplace to go and when it becomes overwhelming
It overflows into the lines of a poem...
Your wonderful words mean a great deal to me,
Thank you for sharing them and for feeling my own.
All that yearning needs someplace to go and when it becomes overwhelming
It overflows into the lines of a poem...
Re. Sens mon amour
9th Nov 2016 10:20am
I love this poem a lot ^^
the last lines and these ones "I found forbidden beauty in a place where beauty was not meant to be, and it filled me." are just breathtaking :-)
Great job!
the last lines and these ones "I found forbidden beauty in a place where beauty was not meant to be, and it filled me." are just breathtaking :-)
Great job!
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Re: Re. Sens mon amour
9th Nov 2016 10:55am
Thank you, for such a generous comment, I appreciate that.
And I'm glad to hear you enjoyed reading...
And I'm glad to hear you enjoyed reading...
Re: Re. Sens mon amour
9th Nov 2016 4:40pm
Evocative, what a great choice of words, thank you, soulwanderer. Glad you came to read...
Re. Sens mon amour
11th Nov 2016 11:32am
Dear Kasai, I read this poem on the day you posted it, but I wasn't able to comment...
It felt like a warm embrace and a cold shower at the same time!
I still don't have the words, but I wanted to let you know how deeply your words are felt!
Thank you for sharing!
It felt like a warm embrace and a cold shower at the same time!
I still don't have the words, but I wanted to let you know how deeply your words are felt!
Thank you for sharing!
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Re: Re. Sens mon amour
11th Nov 2016 11:37am
Ah, but your words were truly felt as well,Duende. I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed,thank you for such lovely words...
Re. Sens mon amour
12th Nov 2016 00:00am
The first verse of this prose poem is stunningly beautiful. I'm normally wary of prose poems on poetry sites, because quite often they seem like an easy alternative for people who don't know how to structure their verses, but this was lovely. It reminds me of some of the shorter work of fantasists and weird writers like H. P. Lovecraft, which created self-contained fantasy landscapes.
As for criticism, I don't think you need the very last line, and just a touch more narrative clarity (i.e. who's going where, exactly) might be useful, though I'm undecided on that latter point. Also, minor thing: the use of an ampersand is jarring when "and" is used in its entirety elsewhere. JMHO, of course. Thank you for the read.
As for criticism, I don't think you need the very last line, and just a touch more narrative clarity (i.e. who's going where, exactly) might be useful, though I'm undecided on that latter point. Also, minor thing: the use of an ampersand is jarring when "and" is used in its entirety elsewhere. JMHO, of course. Thank you for the read.
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Re: Re. Sens mon amour
12th Nov 2016 6:17am
It's always amazing to see you in my comments, your insights and critique are quite helpful and I enjoy the fact that I can learn something from them.
I have to say that I'm flattered by the RL and kind words, thank you for the excellent feed back...
I have to say that I'm flattered by the RL and kind words, thank you for the excellent feed back...
Re. Sens mon amour
18th Nov 2016 6:58am
Kasai my ink mistress.. .
woman.. . I just don't
know..
I've missed your compositions
so much.. now here I am voiceless
-Howlings
woman.. . I just don't
know..
I've missed your compositions
so much.. now here I am voiceless
-Howlings
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Re. Sens mon amour
18th Nov 2016 7:44am
Just beautiful, your lovely comments are painted with poetry. Voiceless or no, I do so enjoy them.
Thank you, sweet Howlings, for making me smile...
Thank you, sweet Howlings, for making me smile...