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Cause and Effect
My legs made it past my heart while you went as deep as you could,
Your eyes lost in my trap of love,
A love that made you feel undeserving,
A love that brought you to the surface of your dark waters,
Brought you to the light of the reflection of those waters,
The sounds that poured out of your mouth,
Poured all over my breast of comfort,
Your eyes met with mine again,
You couldn't look at me for long,
Your eyes told me you'd be caught,
Caught in my trap of climaxing,
My grip didn't help either,
Pain was pleasure for me,
A year without feeling you,
Pain was pleasure for me,
Not feeling your rushing flesh for a year,
Pain was pleasure for me,
Every stroke caused a moan,
Every moan threw your head back,
Now I'm in your dark waters,
Lost in the basement of your mind
These waves got me writing now
Your eyes lost in my trap of love,
A love that made you feel undeserving,
A love that brought you to the surface of your dark waters,
Brought you to the light of the reflection of those waters,
The sounds that poured out of your mouth,
Poured all over my breast of comfort,
Your eyes met with mine again,
You couldn't look at me for long,
Your eyes told me you'd be caught,
Caught in my trap of climaxing,
My grip didn't help either,
Pain was pleasure for me,
A year without feeling you,
Pain was pleasure for me,
Not feeling your rushing flesh for a year,
Pain was pleasure for me,
Every stroke caused a moan,
Every moan threw your head back,
Now I'm in your dark waters,
Lost in the basement of your mind
These waves got me writing now
Published 24th Oct 2016
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Anonymous
25th Oct 2016 11:07am
A love that brought you to the surface of your dark waters.... beautiful. Makes me think of the mystery that lies behind lover's eyes. It's what makes it so thrilling to be loved by someone so obscure
Thank you for taking the time out to dive into this piece. It's a heart felt piece thats dedicated to my boyfriend. When you've met someone who seems like they were dropped right down from heaven but they feel as if they came up from the pits of hell, you have to remind them about the brighter side of life. He is my brighter side of life and he tends to forget that.
Anonymous
- Edited 29th Oct 2016 4:53am
29th Oct 2016 4:34am
It was a pleasure to dive in. Tippin my hat to you.
26th Oct 2016 9:13pm
There's a lot here. Erotic thoughts, images, and metaphors spelled out with open yet sophisticated wording. Desirous and pleasurable writing here I enjoyed.
28th Oct 2016 4:53am
27th Oct 2016 4:01pm
excellent imagery and metaphors, really well written I enjoyed this one :-)
28th Oct 2016 4:54am
You're one of my day one followers, I love when I see your comments! Thank you for following my journey
13th Nov 2017 9:12pm
