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KEENING...
Half asleep, I ignored the warning. Ice pervaded while sirens permeated, lil SPOOKS keening rising amidst the chaos.
Stumbling and tripping over feet, landing hard on elbows and knees, lost, I cry out. Shudders rack our frame. Failed, I failed.
Warm familiar hands lift me up, steady me. It's him, our 'ol blue eyes. Silently he guides us into the darkened bathroom. Softly he leaves us.
Turning the hot water on, we step in. Fully clothed, in the dark, scalding water blankets us. Laying fetal, lil SPOOK is finally safe.
In KAT'S purring embrace, the lil boy releases his pain. Keening his cataclysmic, KAT absorbs the jarring arctic impact, knowing, in sorrow, it's not the first nor last.
{lil SPOOK, I'm deeply, deeply, so very, very sorry. me⛵}
Stumbling and tripping over feet, landing hard on elbows and knees, lost, I cry out. Shudders rack our frame. Failed, I failed.
Warm familiar hands lift me up, steady me. It's him, our 'ol blue eyes. Silently he guides us into the darkened bathroom. Softly he leaves us.
Turning the hot water on, we step in. Fully clothed, in the dark, scalding water blankets us. Laying fetal, lil SPOOK is finally safe.
In KAT'S purring embrace, the lil boy releases his pain. Keening his cataclysmic, KAT absorbs the jarring arctic impact, knowing, in sorrow, it's not the first nor last.
{lil SPOOK, I'm deeply, deeply, so very, very sorry. me⛵}
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Re. KEENING...
3rd Oct 2016 11:32pm
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4th Oct 2016 4:07am
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4th Oct 2016 00:33am
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4th Oct 2016 4:14am
lil SPOOK is our youngest & only male, he also bears our pain. Only fully dressed & in darkness, under scalding water can he release the pressure. My job is to get us there before he breaks. He's ours & protect him furiously. Thank you so much for the compliment & letting me know! Mad respect and love,
me
me
Re. KEENING...
4th Oct 2016 6:15am
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4th Oct 2016 7:04am
Sad but true. His voice also deserves to be heard, not often but enough. Thank you Mr.Feddeler for understanding how sensitive it must be handled. Love and respect,
me
me
Re. KEENING...
4th Oct 2016 2:28pm
This conveys a great deal of emotion I think. Vulnerability, despair, our need to cling together. Where you say, Failed. I failed. That is haunting. I enjoyed it. Namaste.
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4th Oct 2016 6:32pm
Mr. Namaste, this was exposure of our darkest private despair, indeed we do tend to cling tight. If I hadn't made it to the showers, well let's just say we'd all feel the affects of his implosion & mistrust. Next time I'll heed all warnings. I truly respect your work, it's an honor to hear your thoughts & compliments. Mad respect,
SURVIVOR
SURVIVOR
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5th Oct 2016 11:30pm
lol that would be a cool nickname for me. Mr Namaste. Its like Mr Miyagi! HIYAAA! lol I do say it often in the context of feeling peoples reads or any sort of post on the social sites I frequent. Feeling its heart truth. I read somewhere that namaste means - I bow to the light in you.
I am glad my writes speak to you. They are provocative, so what people read into them tends to be all over the map. pdb. price of doing business.
I am glad my writes speak to you. They are provocative, so what people read into them tends to be all over the map. pdb. price of doing business.
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6th Oct 2016 1:16am
We love reading our favored poet's work, to see with fresh stained glass eyes into their universes. Gives me fresh insight and inspiration. Now we also have your new nickname, for us, your Mr. Namaste, if that's okay? Happy to finally make another laugh, joy! You have a collectively uniqueness into your universes, one I haven't read before, it's captivating. Thanx so much for sharing words, mad respect,
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me
Re. KEENING...
4th Oct 2016 11:51pm
intriguing write SURVIVOR, love the descriptiveness you used and your word choice was also great. Sometimes reading the signs, or knowing they are even there is the hardest part, we often only see what we want to see, and it's hard to believe there's anything else there even when there is. Keep up the fight and keep writing/publishing you have a voice and a stage so use it!
Cheers, 19xx
Cheers, 19xx
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5th Oct 2016 2:00am
Yes, here in D.U., the anonymity is our power & voice. Yes that's true, but a lesson learned is another earned tool. Thank you for such glowing compliments my friend. Mad respect,
me
me
Re. KEENING...
6th Oct 2016 6:46pm
this was another hard piece to expose. a rare glimpse into lil SPOOKS world. thank you for the compliment. remember to take care of yourself and don't forget to keep in touch, wishing you well my friend. respectfully
me
me
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10th Oct 2016 7:04pm
hey Kavik good hearing from you. I'm so glad you loved it. stay steady my sweets. much love and respect,
me
me