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KING
Her skin my lips my small hair her skin
Waking is such sweet and sour soup
She says stay and that all work is vanity
So I hug her hard so I don't die alone
One good wind
And this life is gone
When the chicken crossed the road
It failed to rise and hit the bumper
So a family lost its eggs and goes hungry
And a life was lost as real as mine
Holy silence was given for the offering
No sound but a radio Sinatra singing
At least tonight a chicken will cook
In those hill top mud twig homes
A wind blows one
A wind blows all
That side road bag of rags is a man
His bones cut angles in the dust
Old man's eyes are weepy with disease
But not tears in fact he's laughing
Proud of his strong son next to him
Selling one long King fresh off the lake
Their kids play in the moz and the beez
They get no stings or care not if they do
But I've come for the small stones
Weathered uncut the high yellow and red
Mellow red low red and slow yellow
A one dollar makes ten and I go home again
All work is vanity
One wind and it's gone
Waking is such sweet and sour soup
She says stay and that all work is vanity
So I hug her hard so I don't die alone
One good wind
And this life is gone
When the chicken crossed the road
It failed to rise and hit the bumper
So a family lost its eggs and goes hungry
And a life was lost as real as mine
Holy silence was given for the offering
No sound but a radio Sinatra singing
At least tonight a chicken will cook
In those hill top mud twig homes
A wind blows one
A wind blows all
That side road bag of rags is a man
His bones cut angles in the dust
Old man's eyes are weepy with disease
But not tears in fact he's laughing
Proud of his strong son next to him
Selling one long King fresh off the lake
Their kids play in the moz and the beez
They get no stings or care not if they do
But I've come for the small stones
Weathered uncut the high yellow and red
Mellow red low red and slow yellow
A one dollar makes ten and I go home again
All work is vanity
One wind and it's gone
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Re. KING
2nd Oct 2016 6:50pm
This is a celebration of poetry and was wonderful to read. Love the chicken bit. Loved all of it :) Thank you.
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Re: Re. KING
2nd Oct 2016 9:48pm
I love chicken to but road kill can be fowl/foul
Thanks PS for the massive compliment much appreciated
Thanks PS for the massive compliment much appreciated
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Anonymous
2nd Oct 2016 9:24pm
*Wow* this is masterful inking ... I particularly enjoyed the contrast blended with a bit of pro`s & con`s ... and the abstract ~ genuine ... I have 16 chickens of my own so I know the importance of eggs sold to my neighbors; I`m only glad they don`t reach the bumpers on my vehicles, however, I do have to worry about the tires and those whipping mudflats ... Damn, I enjoyed this read ... love to you ... ~Devlin.
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Re: Re. KING
Thanks Devlin very very much appreciated -
The bird clear flew into us - and was an omen of what followed
The bird clear flew into us - and was an omen of what followed
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Anonymous
2nd Oct 2016 10:10pm
As much as a loss brings sadness, its part of cycle of life: one dies in order for another to live.
as for the technical part of the poem, i really enjoyed the unique arrangement of words especially in the first stanza, it flowed so smoothly almost like a riddle.
as for the technical part of the poem, i really enjoyed the unique arrangement of words especially in the first stanza, it flowed so smoothly almost like a riddle.
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2nd Oct 2016 10:24pm
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Anonymous
2nd Oct 2016 10:19pm
Hey Whale......this is awesome......I liked the "chicken" stanza.......the whole write however ROCKS!!! I enjoyed very much......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. KING
2nd Oct 2016 10:25pm
thanks Flowergirl - like Devlin alluded to there's something weird when an abstract like a Joke meets a bumper
Re. KING
3rd Oct 2016 4:50am
A sublime write over the consequential nature of seemingly inconsequential acts...
Well done...
geoff
Well done...
geoff
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Re: Re. KING
3rd Oct 2016 5:37am
thanks HepCat one thing leads to another till nothing to the point one has to wonder at the why
Re. KING
3rd Oct 2016 7:35pm
Wild is the Wind
in the secrets it carries.
Love Ecclesiastes - one of my favorite books.
in the secrets it carries.
Love Ecclesiastes - one of my favorite books.
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Re: Re. KING
3rd Oct 2016 10:57pm
oh yes and striving before it comes to nought - so glad you're here to read this
Re. KING
4th Oct 2016 9:31am
Whale!, I am so creepingly emotional
..and this just pushed my tears out..
it's always your gravity, .
but I'm going to to stop commenting,
only to say, I'll be back.. o'goodness
-Howlings
..and this just pushed my tears out..
it's always your gravity, .
but I'm going to to stop commenting,
only to say, I'll be back.. o'goodness
-Howlings
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4th Oct 2016 1:24pm
Re: Re. KING
6th Oct 2016 4:36am
I gather from this that a KING starts
from inside as anything else does.
Regardless what others may label
you as?
I have read this from the beginning
to end... then end to beginning
-Howlings
from inside as anything else does.
Regardless what others may label
you as?
I have read this from the beginning
to end... then end to beginning
-Howlings
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Re: Re. KING
6th Oct 2016 8:01am
Thanks dear whelm for your careful read
it reflects on a verse called QUEEN that I wrote - we are all Royal by birth - we just forgot it and all the crap we did while we forgot this intrinsic truth amounts to nothing in the end
it reflects on a verse called QUEEN that I wrote - we are all Royal by birth - we just forgot it and all the crap we did while we forgot this intrinsic truth amounts to nothing in the end