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'The Proximity of Bein...'
The Proximity of Bein...'
...Cold, as icy crisp gales
exhales death's breath
tediously near...
...Loved, without exception
existent only in a dream's affair...
...At peace, though the enemies
of a rabid spirit abound raucously...
...Seared, by passions incarnate
singed divinely by a hungry heart's decree...
...Afraid, once the harmonious
soul songs dissipates
into the shadows of nevermore
...Freed, to roam the expanse of
possibilities 'gainst the harvested
crust of earth's regal floor...
...Awake, presently relegated
to the dead of consciousness,
while that flicker of need drives
the 'ragin' seas' towards the next metamorphosis...
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Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
23rd Sep 2016 8:22pm
The title alone leaves me in awe of how talented you are!
Brilliant ink and phrasing, dear Poetik!
into the shadows of nevermore > so beautiful, I think you can make a new poem out of that!
Brilliant ink and phrasing, dear Poetik!
into the shadows of nevermore > so beautiful, I think you can make a new poem out of that!
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23rd Sep 2016 10:03pm
Aaawww u have me big time blushin! :) n yea I easily could, BUT it's be an honor if U did it... I'd love to see what you come up with :) n many thanks my sweetheart. :)
Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 4:28am
You're welcome, sweety!
Didn't expect a challenge coming, but that's something I can't refuse ;-)
I will see if I can come up with something...
Didn't expect a challenge coming, but that's something I can't refuse ;-)
I will see if I can come up with something...
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24th Sep 2016 10:27am
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
23rd Sep 2016 9:09pm
You seriously know how to spread the ink. I love the "flicker of need" driving toward metamorphosis. It's exactly how it seems to be, so often. :)
Willow
Willow
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
23rd Sep 2016 10:26pm
Thank you Willow you're too sweet for saying that... Truly n always grateful to you :)
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
Anonymous
23rd Sep 2016 11:40pm
I hear your words speaking to me
I feel your words slithering through and through,
teaching me something
thank you baby!
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I feel your words slithering through and through,
teaching me something
thank you baby!
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 10:28am
Aaaawwww...you're more than welcome my dearest, n I thank you for such a wonderful comment n your continued sweet support :)
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25th Sep 2016 11:16pm
Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
25th Sep 2016 11:29pm
Aaaawww... You so warm my heart...
C'mere n let me kiss ya! Mmmmuuuaaahhh! thank you sweetness, I'm deeply grateful always :)
C'mere n let me kiss ya! Mmmmuuuaaahhh! thank you sweetness, I'm deeply grateful always :)
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
23rd Sep 2016 11:51pm
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24th Sep 2016 10:30am
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
I wish I had such a vast vocabulary in times of haste.....This is a beautiful poem and it lets a mind be distracted for a minute from all the negativity all around... Thank you
p.s. I have a 4' x 3' framed colored pencil drawing I made many years ago called "close proximity"
This reminded me of it....
p.s. I have a 4' x 3' framed colored pencil drawing I made many years ago called "close proximity"
This reminded me of it....
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 10:33am
My sweetness! So long since your last visit, thought I lost you... Thankful to hear from you again :) truly appreciate you n wow, a drawing? Please let me see it!? Plz? lol
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 5:10am
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24th Sep 2016 10:34am
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 7:11am
'Afraid, once the harmonious
soul songs dissipates
into the shadows of nevermore'
Really liked this,great piece....
soul songs dissipates
into the shadows of nevermore'
Really liked this,great piece....
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 10:36am
Aaaawww...so flattering! Thank you sweetheart, greatly appreciate your continued support of my ink :)
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 1:14pm
You already know i think you are the bomb.com this just further illustrates why..love your versatility...this was awe inspiring...makes me think of seasons changing and the rebirth of life...the rebirth of being...awakening human being...the rebirth,the feeling...ahh the rebirth of the poet..anyrate loved this and apologies for rambling on..Stellar Scribe Sir!!
Fav lines:
"...Awake, presently relegated
to the dead of consciousness,
while that flicker of need drives
the 'ragin' seas' towards the next metamorphosis... "
Fav lines:
"...Awake, presently relegated
to the dead of consciousness,
while that flicker of need drives
the 'ragin' seas' towards the next metamorphosis... "
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 1:42pm
Aaaaaawwww...well u just turned me a pile of mush lol thank you my precious one! Truly n always grateful for you...
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 3:38pm
poe, your style
& flow are phenomenal
always in awe of
how seamless
your poetry is
xo
& flow are phenomenal
always in awe of
how seamless
your poetry is
xo
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 3:46pm
Wow...I wish I could put this comment in a "best of" list! I'm super flattered n very grateful for ur thoughts n support :)
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 4:52pm
Here's hoping your next metamorphis doesn't lead you towards a deathly consciousness !
Freedom, must be sweet.
Enjoy... 🌻🎈🌞😎
Freedom, must be sweet.
Enjoy... 🌻🎈🌞😎
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Sep 2016 5:01pm
Gee thanks! lol I'm gonna drink with you lol n appreciate hearing from u again, been a long time since last gad a visit... Appreciate u sweetheart :)
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Oct 2016 8:16pm
The flesh on my arms and neck raised. Encaptured my short breaths on a spiritual ride.
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
24th Oct 2016 8:21pm
Wow...what a great, sweet thing to say! I'm deeply flattered... Thank u for that n ur list add... :)
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
10th Nov 2016 7:15pm
Sometimes it amaze's me how a series of words can finish as such a powerful peice... Just like what you have done here. I love this, particularly, 'into the shadows of nevermore" I really connected to that part ✌
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Re: Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
11th Nov 2016 1:27am
Yes bein a lover of words I completely understand where your comin from... N truly thank you for your thoughts on my ink :)
Re. 'The Proximity of Bein...'
28th Nov 2016 11:22pm
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29th Nov 2016 9:06am
Yea, it's certainly not much credit I can take though...I truly feel it's God given... But I will thank you much, you know on His behalf! lol.
Appreciate your support always my bro. in spirit n soul :)
Appreciate your support always my bro. in spirit n soul :)