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Breathe
I don't have much to say
nowadays
weightless words, mull
from bare branches
lulled of burdens
blossoms fall
pretending not to know
anything.
Questions linger
in the palm of our hands
folded in quarters and halves
with the same quotidian pall
grey and dull
negotiating death
in curve of the day, and
I watch you shift in your skin
loose and aloof
with fading irises
waiting for color of pain.
Everything's agreed upon
in silence
oppressedly
sinking in ocean's bed
tangled intangibles
together; yet, apart
beneath cloudless air.
We speak in whispers
not to stir the dust, viscid
settled gutless sediments
on furniture and broken flowers
heavy and ancient
unhurried moments in fluid hours.
Desire nestles in sorrow
speckles of the past
mine, yet; not me
the coffee currents
flow in my tongueless mouth
cold and placid
I don't have much to say
but
breathe.
Written by
Vee
(Rina)
Published 17th Sep 2016
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Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 4:37pm
Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 4:54pm
Thank you so much Brenda :)
It's one of those cycles that we all need to go through in order to find focus when too many things are happening at once. Good to see you as always xo
It's one of those cycles that we all need to go through in order to find focus when too many things are happening at once. Good to see you as always xo
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Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 5:17pm
Im craving the idea of hibernation, the stillness of air, the shortness of light, curling possessively around the warmth..i can turn this into another little poetry i guess lol
Mourganna, thank you for your lovely comment, you make me smile with your presence, much love :)
Mourganna, thank you for your lovely comment, you make me smile with your presence, much love :)
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Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 7:07pm
Thank you OS for your great feedback and i just realized i need to to take a stroll through your work. I've had a busy few weeks and looks like i'm quite behind in reading all the fabulous poetry.
Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 7:36pm
Vee your words always have weight and you've said plenty with not much to say. I love the word quotidian because it's one word, though formal in English is commonly used in Spanish, cotidiano. It is beautiful language that turns me on. Brava!
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Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 8:09pm
It is a wonderful word GW and i have a few of my favorites actually not all necessarily with beautiful definitions but i enjoy them the way they sound phonically and this happens to be one. Thank you for your keen eye and appreciating the fine details in this, its always such a pleasure to see your feedbacks G :)
Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 7:45pm
This is everything my Vee ,
I feel such importance and
need here.
Speechless but breathing.
Powerful wavelengths.
-Howlings
I feel such importance and
need here.
Speechless but breathing.
Powerful wavelengths.
-Howlings
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Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 8:21pm
Sometimes whispers are louder than words and i couldn't help but emphasize on that aspect in here, tip toeing around the inevitable when the only thing at the moment is plausible, is to ~ breathe.
Thank you beautiful Noire for feeling the depths of my lines..my deepest appreciation.
Thank you beautiful Noire for feeling the depths of my lines..my deepest appreciation.
Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 7:49pm
This right here, you have said a lot! <3 love this and feel this sometimes as well. xo
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Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 9:49pm
I know its a natural cycle that we all need to go through it but i swear M. Lady it feels like we won't snap out of it sometimes.. but I guess we're all here still, so we're okay.
Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 11:44pm
Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 7:54pm
Didnt realize i was holding my breath til i reached the end of this gripping poem..Excellent as always Vee..full of subtle charm and truly breathtaking imagery...tinged in the perfect shade of melancholic gray
Fav lines
We speak in whispers
not to stir the dust, viscid
settled gutless sediments
on the furniture and broken flowers
heavy and ancient
unhurried moments in fluid hours.
Fav lines
We speak in whispers
not to stir the dust, viscid
settled gutless sediments
on the furniture and broken flowers
heavy and ancient
unhurried moments in fluid hours.
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Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 10:06pm
ah PD, my beautiful friend, so good to have you visit my work and now that its published and done, breathing seems effortless lol
Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 8:52pm
What an inspiring flow of words woven to a blanket of melancholy and beauty. Overwhelming, Rina!
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Re: Re. Breathe
17th Sep 2016 9:26pm
Thank you my dear Miss Chi, a beautiful praise from you, the reigning queen of measured words, is truly flattering, much love to you, always xo
Re. Breathe
18th Sep 2016 8:00am
Re. Breathe
maybe the words are too heavy to speak,
so we put them in poems to lighten their burdens.
& ours. if that doesn't work.
all we can do is cry...
you're beautiful...
so we put them in poems to lighten their burdens.
& ours. if that doesn't work.
all we can do is cry...
you're beautiful...
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Re: Re. Breathe
20th Sep 2016 2:40am
Re. Breathe
18th Sep 2016 5:54pm
Terse yet fluid a phenomenal that grips with the beauty of the writing and the universality of melancholy
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Re: Re. Breathe
21st Sep 2016 3:42pm
Thank you Whale, it pretty much wrote by itself, it was one of those writes that was effortless and the beauty (the unintentional design) how the ending tied with the beginning was a nice surprise even to me.
Re. Breathe
18th Sep 2016 11:09pm
Vee, your ink is a blessing to witness! I'm always in awe of your pen. This is stunning!Xo
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Re: Re. Breathe
29th Sep 2016 00:40am
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Re: Re. Breathe
29th Sep 2016 00:45am
That's how i feel when i read your work Tod.
Very rarely i'm impressed works' by male writers, but you set a precedence in keeping that fine balance and I'm so glad we had the chance to work together xo
Very rarely i'm impressed works' by male writers, but you set a precedence in keeping that fine balance and I'm so glad we had the chance to work together xo
Re. Breathe
Anonymous
19th Sep 2016 8:25pm
you certainly delved deep in the mine of sorrow for this one. i can feel it when I read it. i don't know how it would sound as a performance peice

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Re: Re. Breathe
29th Sep 2016 00:45am
Thank you Jay, i appreciate you dropping by and for your time reading and commenting :)
Re. Breathe
8th Oct 2016 2:28pm
as always..your words run soothing
to the eyes Vee..and as always,,
i have so slow my pace to collect the
sentiments within your words..
you are flawless with that pen lady..
to the eyes Vee..and as always,,
i have so slow my pace to collect the
sentiments within your words..
you are flawless with that pen lady..
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Re: Re. Breathe
25th Feb 2017 4:52am
Thank you Naajir for always rewarding me with more compliments than deserving, I appreciate your kindness and praise :)
Re. Breathe
16th Feb 2017 9:14pm
Automatic Writes always tend to bare much of the self...Giving
Truly felt the pause with this-in a whirl-wind of life.
Truly felt the pause with this-in a whirl-wind of life.
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Re: Re. Breathe
25th Feb 2017 4:54am
yep...it started just like that..i didn't have much to say and after saying all that's been said in this poem it came back to circle and i was done saying with nothing more left to say.
Re: Re. Breathe
25th Feb 2017 5:00am
I have a circle in mind for You-I will show it to You one day...not too far away ;)
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25th Feb 2017 5:05am