You're Just So Pathetic

Boo hoo Ms. Winehouse. Lol jk

Always love your stuff. Never fails to be poignant and direct. Lol

Ty green eyes

Steezy

Steezy??? Lol

Is there a problem with this word?

Idk what it means I'm asking u

It means its clean there's sketchy steezy and wow wtf is this gibberish in my vocab you have reached steezy I guess Idk.

Lol I hope that's a good thing ;)

But I feel sad though at this piece it is good all but only one line rhymes lol

I didn't even mean for any lines to rhyme. Lol you like rhyme??

Are you serious with that lol all my stuff is rhyme.

Lol I know but reading is different from writing

...some polishing my dear...for the reader.

You're Just So Pathetic
 
Adderall and redbull  
Got me up for days
stinging in my chest, never dulls away
If I could turn into you, I'd truly set me free
But that is no reality  
No chance of ever happening  
So I'll deal
But I can't, these pills are wearing off, can't to do it alone

(something in the three lines above needs further work to help the reader with what you are trying to say)

You're just so pathetic  
Let me move on
If I wanted to be a puppet I would have stayed with the father that looked through me, never at me
Fuck it  
I'll just fill my water bottle  
With something cold  
Forget about this mess  
And let you deal with me...all fucked up  
and over you  

You are just so...pathetic  

:-)

Just knowing you read is awesome..  I will fix it asap hemi ;))

Liking this

Ty sweetie

Love is in fairytales.. Not my poems lol.. Love isn't for me ;)