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Nirvana
like a hurricane
you whirl over me
twisting the core
of my existence
every part
of me rotates
in synchronicity
with your
circulation
your virile voice
bursts in my brain
morphing every
cell with the
magic phrase
I AM
painfully aware
of your power
my heart skips a
beat as i hear
you speak
Start counting
piece. by. piece.
my burdens...
...fade away
release from pain
rolls down my face
( sweet oblivion )
my mind sinks into
nothingness my
thoughts get
lost in rambling
rigmaroles
as i enter the
gate of nirvana
i drift into the
calm of your eye
floating like clouds
in slow motion
you whirl over me
twisting the core
of my existence
every part
of me rotates
in synchronicity
with your
circulation
your virile voice
bursts in my brain
morphing every
cell with the
magic phrase
I AM
painfully aware
of your power
my heart skips a
beat as i hear
you speak
Start counting
piece. by. piece.
my burdens...
...fade away
release from pain
rolls down my face
( sweet oblivion )
my mind sinks into
nothingness my
thoughts get
lost in rambling
rigmaroles
as i enter the
gate of nirvana
i drift into the
calm of your eye
floating like clouds
in slow motion
Author's Note
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Re. Nirvana
Anonymous
26th Aug 2016 8:47pm
' i drift into the
calm of your eye
floating like clouds
in slow motion ' ... now this is freaking poetic!. . .Lady Duende, your descriptions are inimitable and profound. . .love to you, Lady. . .~Devlin.
calm of your eye
floating like clouds
in slow motion ' ... now this is freaking poetic!. . .Lady Duende, your descriptions are inimitable and profound. . .love to you, Lady. . .~Devlin.
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Re: Re. Nirvana
26th Aug 2016 8:56pm
Lady Devlin, you always amaze me with your comments!
Freaking poetic and inimitable... I can't ask for more :-)
Gratitude and Love to you, Duende
Freaking poetic and inimitable... I can't ask for more :-)
Gratitude and Love to you, Duende
Re. Nirvana
26th Aug 2016 11:06pm
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27th Aug 2016 4:21am
Re. Nirvana
27th Aug 2016 3:25am
"your baritone
bursts in my brain
morphing every
cell with the
magic phrase"
I love a man that can send us to that place with just the sound of their voice..
sizzling erotic lovely Duende..
love Crim
bursts in my brain
morphing every
cell with the
magic phrase"
I love a man that can send us to that place with just the sound of their voice..
sizzling erotic lovely Duende..
love Crim
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Re: Re. Nirvana
27th Aug 2016 4:28am
Thank you so much, Crim!
Yes, nothing can beat a voice, so important!
When it's right (intonation, warmth) it can put me in a trance...
Love, Duende
Yes, nothing can beat a voice, so important!
When it's right (intonation, warmth) it can put me in a trance...
Love, Duende
Re. Nirvana
27th Aug 2016 7:32am
" I AM
Painfully aware
of your Power"
Love that line!
Such a strong write.
Painfully aware
of your Power"
Love that line!
Such a strong write.
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Re: Re. Nirvana
27th Aug 2016 7:51am
Thank you for commenting and calling it a strong write!
I like that you've chosen those lines to highlight, because Power was of course a strong theme in the poem ;-)
I like that you've chosen those lines to highlight, because Power was of course a strong theme in the poem ;-)
Re. Nirvana
Anonymous
27th Aug 2016 7:48am
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Re. Nirvana
28th Aug 2016 1:04am
'i drift into the
calm of your eye
floating like clouds
in slow motion '
So amazing!
calm of your eye
floating like clouds
in slow motion '
So amazing!
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31st Aug 2016 10:08pm
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1st Sep 2016 6:13am
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Re. Nirvana
Anonymous
7th Sep 2016 6:34am
It feels like a storm when strong feelings wash over you. I think you used the metaphor well. The little breaks that punctuate the piece: I AM, Start Counting, and ~sweet obliviion~ are like thunder crashes as the poem rains down. The allusion to a circle, the visual eye of the storm, as your last stanza is a nice touch. As with much of your writing, you've got some nice sounds going on with your words.
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Re: Re. Nirvana
7th Sep 2016 4:38pm
"As with much of your writing, you've got some nice sounds going on with your words" > thank you so much for mentioning that! Since I learned about 'sounds' I try to incorporate that in my work, I just love it!
I'm happy you got the 'eye' in the last stanza and think I used the metaphor well! That's what started this poem... it's such a fascinating concept!
Thunder crashes... I never looked at it that way, but I like it ;-)
Thank your for sharing your view on this piece!
I'm happy you got the 'eye' in the last stanza and think I used the metaphor well! That's what started this poem... it's such a fascinating concept!
Thunder crashes... I never looked at it that way, but I like it ;-)
Thank your for sharing your view on this piece!
Re. Nirvana
5th Oct 2016 3:48am
My woman I just want to quote
your existence here.. every
verse and line.. .
this one settled within my regions
something beautiful,
ow!
-Howlings
your existence here.. every
verse and line.. .
this one settled within my regions
something beautiful,
ow!
-Howlings
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Re: Re. Nirvana
5th Oct 2016 4:37pm
My Noire,
How can I respond to such an amazing comment?
I will leave it at: lost for words...
Thank you so much!
Duende
How can I respond to such an amazing comment?
I will leave it at: lost for words...
Thank you so much!
Duende