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Beauty in the Ballroom
T’was in the dimly lit ballroom,
in a grand palace
that my wandering eyes
were caught & mesmerized
by a heavenly beauty
sipping from her chalice
At that moment,
all others were nothing more
flickering shades
that my eyes evade
I was bewitched
caught in her allure
“M’lady” I extended my hand
“I have traveled far and wide,
would you by chance,
let me have this dance…
i’d be honored,
to swing by your side”
The end of my journey
my destiny awaits
for i have never witnessed such elegance
in all the world, nothing close to relevant
I’d give anything
if only we could dance the night away.
in a grand palace
that my wandering eyes
were caught & mesmerized
by a heavenly beauty
sipping from her chalice
At that moment,
all others were nothing more
flickering shades
that my eyes evade
I was bewitched
caught in her allure
“M’lady” I extended my hand
“I have traveled far and wide,
would you by chance,
let me have this dance…
i’d be honored,
to swing by your side”
The end of my journey
my destiny awaits
for i have never witnessed such elegance
in all the world, nothing close to relevant
I’d give anything
if only we could dance the night away.
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Re. Beauty in the Ballroom
26th Aug 2016 2:52am
can't go wrong with writing about that true and honest old school chivalrous love lol
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Re: Re. Beauty in the Ballroom
26th Aug 2016 3:03am
This one is cool, because it was HEAVILY inspired by an actual event in my life. The Ballroom, was actually a bar. Lol.
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26th Aug 2016 3:06am
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26th Aug 2016 12:20pm
Re. Beauty in the Ballroom
26th Aug 2016 1:00pm
Nothing like finding that one woman who stands out in a crowded room. ...nice!!!!
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26th Aug 2016 1:25pm
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Re. Beauty in the Ballroom
Anonymous
27th Aug 2016 9:48pm
Such a beautiful piece. 💓
Words which take you to that enchanting place.
I do not cross paths with many chivalrous masterpieces, such as this.
Very refreshing.
Well done.
Words which take you to that enchanting place.
I do not cross paths with many chivalrous masterpieces, such as this.
Very refreshing.
Well done.
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Re: Re. Beauty in the Ballroom
27th Aug 2016 10:09pm
Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your kind words! This one is special, because it was based on an actual event.
Re. Beauty in the Ballroom
8th Sep 2016 12:50pm
Ahh Chaotic, enjoyed this. Chivalry is not dead, believe me a gent can weave magic with manners. Great work, LadyRain.
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10th Sep 2016 00:01am
Re. Beauty in the Ballroom
5th Feb 2017 6:46pm
I like the hyperboles in the final stanza. The theme of fantasy can be seen in your diction: "palace," "chalice," "bewitched," "allure," and etc. Throughout the piece, your capitalization of the word "i" is inconsistent and not gramatically correct. But I like the feeling of a completed life, which strengthens in the last stanza.
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Re: Re. Beauty in the Ballroom
5th Feb 2017 8:46pm
Yes!! I was recently informed about the capitalization of "I". I've since, habituated it.