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speed of sight! no escape
the eyes knew what was said
the heart tried to escape the chest
the message shot it at mach seven
it knew it woudn' be the same again
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Re. speed of sight! no escape
Anonymous
6th Aug 2016 6:13pm
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Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
6th Aug 2016 6:39pm
Mate
thank You!
I reckon fate
brought you here
for a genuine reason
I truly enjoy your feedback
like the fruit of the season!
Thank You mate, appreciate your kind feedback..and am glad you liked what you read!!
thank You!
I reckon fate
brought you here
for a genuine reason
I truly enjoy your feedback
like the fruit of the season!
Thank You mate, appreciate your kind feedback..and am glad you liked what you read!!
Re. speed of sight! no escape
Anonymous
6th Aug 2016 7:27pm
This is truly breathtaking.
So very passionate. Words that awaken the soul.
Beautiful ink 💓
So very passionate. Words that awaken the soul.
Beautiful ink 💓
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Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
6th Aug 2016 7:37pm
awwe... WTH you make not only me but my heart smile too... your gracious feedback is truly adorable! Thank you for your kindness!!
Cheers!
:-)
Cheers!
:-)
Re. speed of sight! no escape
6th Aug 2016 9:56pm
Finite! Restricted area not for the faint hearted.
To understand "it woudn' be the same again"
is an awful truism to lay upon the heart. Well
done!
To understand "it woudn' be the same again"
is an awful truism to lay upon the heart. Well
done!
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Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
6th Aug 2016 10:38pm
You said it best Jerry..! Indeed not for the faint hearted..appreciate deeply your insight and appreciation!
Kind regards
KDAmB
Kind regards
KDAmB
Re. speed of sight! no escape
7th Aug 2016 1:27am
Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
7th Aug 2016 5:24pm
Thank You Kate!! Your presence always brings a big smile to my face!! am humbled by your follow! Thank You!
Re. speed of sight! no escape
7th Aug 2016 4:59am
not sure I get to or relate to this one - maybe I am just having a dumbass moment, forgive me :-)
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Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
7th Aug 2016 5:30pm
David... my dear friend..what matters is your honest opinion/view...am sure there' some more was needed to make it clear from my end...
my attempt here was to describe the moment when two eyes meet and so much is communicated without a word being said, and when that communication is the confirmation of your fear i.e. mutual falling for eachother, the heart knowing what's coming tries to escape before the message delivered to the eye reaches it...but the speed of sight is the speed of light, here I used the rhetorical mach 7 (7 times the speed of sound), the heart has no chance of escaping the chest, for it knew it's not gonna be the same again...
I admire your sheer honesty of opinion. No words enough to express my gratitude mate!!
Cheers!
KDAmB
my attempt here was to describe the moment when two eyes meet and so much is communicated without a word being said, and when that communication is the confirmation of your fear i.e. mutual falling for eachother, the heart knowing what's coming tries to escape before the message delivered to the eye reaches it...but the speed of sight is the speed of light, here I used the rhetorical mach 7 (7 times the speed of sound), the heart has no chance of escaping the chest, for it knew it's not gonna be the same again...
I admire your sheer honesty of opinion. No words enough to express my gratitude mate!!
Cheers!
KDAmB
Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
8th Aug 2016 10:57am
yep, (lol) It was me, having a dumbass moment - your explanation made the penny drop and as I suspected it was a truly beautiful poem. It's a double dumbass moment when I realised that I have experienced that very thing - when I met my wife :-)
I always try to be honest in my comments and feel that if done with love, truth is always the best policy :-)
Keep writing, you are so good at this my friend :-)
I always try to be honest in my comments and feel that if done with love, truth is always the best policy :-)
Keep writing, you are so good at this my friend :-)
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Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
8th Aug 2016 1:01pm
Awwe so sweet to know you went through.. and hey this proves that you're a perfect human Dave...we somehow miss our own important bits when the talk is on about it...only to remember it past the point.. Honoured to be your friend mate!
Re. speed of sight! no escape
7th Aug 2016 7:49am
Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
7th Aug 2016 5:32pm
Welcome Bro DC!! thank you so much for your kind appreciation and RL.. turly humbled by both!!
regards
KDAmB
regards
KDAmB
Re. speed of sight! no escape
8th Aug 2016 5:56am
From a man who barely writes to a man who's now writing so fluently freely beautifully and now experimenting. It's honour to read ure work
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Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
8th Aug 2016 1:04pm
Bro I feel privileged to have such company as yours and the peers above! Your kind appreciation is what inspires and motivates me.. Thank you so much for your generous support and affection!
Cheers
KDAmB
Cheers
KDAmB
Re. speed of sight! no escape
8th Aug 2016 5:47pm
Love at first sight...Or the beginning of the end...
Nice shot of distilled vulnerability.
Loved this N, LR
Nice shot of distilled vulnerability.
Loved this N, LR
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Re: Re. speed of sight! no escape
Welcome welcome welcome!
You smashed Neil's head LR! :-)
Welcome your kind words and visiting am humbled by your RL!
Thank You!!
You smashed Neil's head LR! :-)
Welcome your kind words and visiting am humbled by your RL!
Thank You!!