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Out of Time
Let's turn up these speakers
so loud that no one can hear us
and we feel the music in our bellies
Let's create our secret world
where we can scream and growl
from the deepest depths of longing
Let's free the animal inside us
the primal side that so many hide
in the cages of our subconsciousness
Let's get loud and animalistic
and crawl into each other’s skin
letting our inner demons come out
Let's feed on lust all night long
sucking the life out of each other
till we lie ruined between the sheets
Let's live our darkest dreams
and don’t waste our days waiting
because we are running out of time
so loud that no one can hear us
and we feel the music in our bellies
Let's create our secret world
where we can scream and growl
from the deepest depths of longing
Let's free the animal inside us
the primal side that so many hide
in the cages of our subconsciousness
Let's get loud and animalistic
and crawl into each other’s skin
letting our inner demons come out
Let's feed on lust all night long
sucking the life out of each other
till we lie ruined between the sheets
Let's live our darkest dreams
and don’t waste our days waiting
because we are running out of time
Author's Note
Muse - Time is Running Out.
https://youtu.be/hOAvK4O7Opo
https://youtu.be/hOAvK4O7Opo
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Re. Out of Time
2nd Aug 2016 5:05pm
Sounds like a lovely night to me. Exhausted in passion, a great place to be. Nice write.
P.S. Change waist to waste in your last stanza.
P.S. Change waist to waste in your last stanza.
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Re: Re. Out of Time
4th Aug 2016 10:46am
I appreciate your comment, thank you very much!
Thanks for the correction... I can't stand it when I make a spelling mistake ;-)
Thanks for the correction... I can't stand it when I make a spelling mistake ;-)
Re. Out of Time
Anonymous
13th Aug 2016 7:59am
Yes, let's! I like this. :-)
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Re. Out of Time
Anonymous
5th Sep 2016 12:18pm
Fav line: Let's get loud and animalistic
Yes yes yes!! ;) great piece D!!
Yes yes yes!! ;) great piece D!!
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Re: Re. Out of Time
5th Sep 2016 1:02pm
Thank you for your amazing comment!
And yes... the best way is the primal way ;-)
And yes... the best way is the primal way ;-)
Re. Out of Time
Yes!!!! Reading this in the a.m. is causing an interesting reaction inside my "action"
A witness to your truth. #releasin'
btw......the world is not as large as you think 😉
Ahh "Time".....can we get naked and dance?
A witness to your truth. #releasin'
btw......the world is not as large as you think 😉
Ahh "Time".....can we get naked and dance?
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Re: Re. Out of Time
20th Sep 2016 5:32pm
You are my number one commenter today!
Glad to hear you enjoyed it, seems like someone needs a cold shower again...
Glad to hear you enjoyed it, seems like someone needs a cold shower again...
Re. Out of Time
2nd Mar 2017 5:38pm
out of time...so let us bask in the moment!!
deep dive and take it for all its worth..
yes yes!!!
deep dive and take it for all its worth..
yes yes!!!
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Re: Re. Out of Time
3rd Mar 2017 7:18am
Thank you so much, Naajir! Great to hear you enjoyed this one! It always makes me smile when I get a comment on an older poem... looking back on how I wrote when I just started writing :-)
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Re: Re. Out of Time
16th Sep 2018 5:07am
Ah, I see you found an oldie ;-)
Reading it again made me realize how much estranged I am from writing erotica, but I'm glad you think it's a nice read! And yes... primal nights it is in casa Duende :-)
Thanks heaps for the read and comment!
Reading it again made me realize how much estranged I am from writing erotica, but I'm glad you think it's a nice read! And yes... primal nights it is in casa Duende :-)
Thanks heaps for the read and comment!
Re. Out of Time
2nd Oct 2018 5:31am
I like the note you leave this on. There’s a balance to each stanza that holds everything together in steady rhythm while you search out the words one by one to describe the longing in your nerves and the pit of your belly. Still enjoying exploring your roots
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Re: Re. Out of Time
2nd Oct 2018 6:36am
Glad to hear you still enjoy exploring my roots :-)
It's a longing indeed... can't beat the combination of sex and loud music!
Thank you so much for your feedback, it means a lot!
It's a longing indeed... can't beat the combination of sex and loud music!
Thank you so much for your feedback, it means a lot!
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Re. Out of Time
29th Sep 2024 2:28pm
Duende this is so enticing. I love the way you keep inviting him to enjoy pleasure.
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Re: Re. Out of Time
1st Oct 2024 11:53am
You found an oldie :-) It's amazing to read something from the past, see how much my work and style has changed. Thanks heaps for you visit and comment, Fia 💕