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A performance For The Gods
Nothing like
the moon on your skin
and the dirt against my back
as I pull you closer
to my kisses
Tasting the salt
of the sea
on your tanned skin
Seeing it
turbulent
reflected in your eyes
Our desires
are fiery
Within us
lies the lust
of the newborn Earth
I am insatiable
I am one
with the sirens of legend
My body shudders
ready to feel you
I tempt you
and you follow
I want to scream
with the fulfillment
of my fantasies
I want you to overwhelm me
overflowing ecstasy
I want to cum
with the explosion
of a thousand dying stars!
And they fall from the heavens
bloody splotches
a gift of the gods
I am your thirsty love
Your sensual goddess
The obedient slave
You
My throbbing lover
My demanding sir
Unyielding master
In the night
we become each others
nothing
I reach for you
and pull you
Down
Down
We collide
The Lunacy is gone
And oh
Oh!
The first thrust into me
That breaking point
of pain and pleasure
The feeling
of being full
As we push and pull
wild with lust
We
fall
into rhythm
with the music
the invisible insects
perform for us
How beautiful this is
The moon, the sea
and the shuddering of our bodies
against the budding Earth
the moon on your skin
and the dirt against my back
as I pull you closer
to my kisses
Tasting the salt
of the sea
on your tanned skin
Seeing it
turbulent
reflected in your eyes
Our desires
are fiery
Within us
lies the lust
of the newborn Earth
I am insatiable
I am one
with the sirens of legend
My body shudders
ready to feel you
I tempt you
and you follow
I want to scream
with the fulfillment
of my fantasies
I want you to overwhelm me
overflowing ecstasy
I want to cum
with the explosion
of a thousand dying stars!
And they fall from the heavens
bloody splotches
a gift of the gods
I am your thirsty love
Your sensual goddess
The obedient slave
You
My throbbing lover
My demanding sir
Unyielding master
In the night
we become each others
nothing
I reach for you
and pull you
Down
Down
We collide
The Lunacy is gone
And oh
Oh!
The first thrust into me
That breaking point
of pain and pleasure
The feeling
of being full
As we push and pull
wild with lust
We
fall
into rhythm
with the music
the invisible insects
perform for us
How beautiful this is
The moon, the sea
and the shuddering of our bodies
against the budding Earth
Published 22nd Jul 2011
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Anonymous
22nd Jul 2011 10:12pm
"i want to cum with the explosion of a thousand dying stars". Thats a supurb line. I love this piece. Its utterly perfect. The wording, format, spacing, phrasing...everything about is amazing! So good!!
23rd Jul 2011 11:28am
I don't think I've written a single line in any of my other poems that means more to me than this one.. I don't mean that in the way it seems, but I can't find the proper words to explain what I do mean.
But.. it's just interesting you pointed it out, and perhaps a little.. i don't know.. embarrassing? It's my first erotic post, maybe that's it. I can't help but feel like I just got caught at something because of your comment! My face is humbly red!
But.. it's just interesting you pointed it out, and perhaps a little.. i don't know.. embarrassing? It's my first erotic post, maybe that's it. I can't help but feel like I just got caught at something because of your comment! My face is humbly red!
Anonymous
23rd Jul 2011 11:51am
It is erotic, emotive, and lush.
If you put in some punctuation it would be even better.
If you put in some punctuation it would be even better.
23rd Jul 2011 12:08pm
I considered more punctuation, but I decided in order to give the two lines the maximum emphasis I needed to stay away from punctuation in other places. I figured I'd go with the 'less is more' rule.
I thank you for your kind words. That you found me worth commenting on means a lot to me!
I thank you for your kind words. That you found me worth commenting on means a lot to me!
Anonymous
23rd Jul 2011 12:18pm
And yet they kind of run into each other pell mell. Balderdashery like.
Example:
Tasting the salt
of the sea
on your tanned skin:
Seeing it
turbulent,
reflected in your eyes. This is a sentence fragmentm by the way. You don't tie it up.
Our desires
are fiery;
Within us
lies the lust
of the newborn Earth.
I am insatiable!
I am one
with the sirens of legend.
My body shudders,
ready to feel you. 'ready' - perhaps eager?
I tempt you ---try 'I tempt,
and you follow you follow...
Example:
Tasting the salt
of the sea
on your tanned skin:
Seeing it
turbulent,
reflected in your eyes. This is a sentence fragmentm by the way. You don't tie it up.
Our desires
are fiery;
Within us
lies the lust
of the newborn Earth.
I am insatiable!
I am one
with the sirens of legend.
My body shudders,
ready to feel you. 'ready' - perhaps eager?
I tempt you ---try 'I tempt,
and you follow you follow...
16th Sep 2022 10:16am
Have just read this for the first time, and would say were I there then, good effort for a first erotic piece. As suggested by the title, you convey a scene of al fresco, nocturnal sea side lovemaking.
