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Riddle
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The day when he packed and left for new shores,
Was when peace of mind would be challenged.
He never had peace of mind before now,
So he's been a raw work in progress.
Whenever souls try to remake a life
And discovered exceedingly wanting,
Will either find opportunity rife,
Or the wrong time to harvest its season.
It's then a crossroad's decision is made
To start the next step in its journey.
There's no guarantee the direction is true,
The final step comes after many.
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The day when he packed and left for new shores,
Was when peace of mind would be challenged.
He never had peace of mind before now,
So he's been a raw work in progress.
Whenever souls try to remake a life
And discovered exceedingly wanting,
Will either find opportunity rife,
Or the wrong time to harvest its season.
It's then a crossroad's decision is made
To start the next step in its journey.
There's no guarantee the direction is true,
The final step comes after many.
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Re. Riddle
9th Jul 2016 8:41am
Every season is a new beginning, a growing season to prepare for the reaping of the harvest of our hearts...
The Earth is round and every breath of air eventually comes back around...
JJ
The Earth is round and every breath of air eventually comes back around...
JJ
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Joe, I want to thank you for stopping by to give your thoughts on this; your take on it, describing about a breath of air, is thought-provoking.
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Anonymous
9th Jul 2016 9:55am
My great inspiration ,is realizing your poem mimics my reality.
Jade you are a true artist.
Smiling with Jade always. 📝
Jade you are a true artist.
Smiling with Jade always. 📝
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10th Jul 2016 3:17am
With much thanks to you, Mom (if I may), for passing that on to me, being inspired, and for that beautiful smile!
my growing admiration, dear woman...
ever
Jade🎏
my growing admiration, dear woman...
ever
Jade🎏
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The greatest riddle of them all - the ending shows which start was true, but at it's end it starts anew...
Thank you Jade for this publishing...
I carry it with me while I seek the answer to my own riddle...
and to my RL it goes...
geoff cat
Thank you Jade for this publishing...
I carry it with me while I seek the answer to my own riddle...
and to my RL it goes...
geoff cat
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10th Jul 2016 3:24am
Thank you dear Geoffrey. And remember...
It's all right not to know what to do next. You renew, restore, and regroup. Do that first, and then - just like a poem that seems to elude you - something will spark, and it will have meaning. That's when you're ready for that next step. I was trying to tell you something about that earlier today, but I digressed and forgot to finish. Next time, i hope I'll remember to tell you.
It's all right not to know what to do next. You renew, restore, and regroup. Do that first, and then - just like a poem that seems to elude you - something will spark, and it will have meaning. That's when you're ready for that next step. I was trying to tell you something about that earlier today, but I digressed and forgot to finish. Next time, i hope I'll remember to tell you.
Re. Riddle
9th Jul 2016 1:42pm
Beautifully stated, and man, did you just say a mouthful of truth! :)
Willow
Willow
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Ah Willow, it was a revelation that grew and revealed as I wrote. That's why I'm filled with an author's passion, and always honored when a reader reflects and comes to their own revelation bouncing off my words. Thank you!
-Jade🎏
-Jade🎏
Re. Riddle
9th Jul 2016 6:49pm
Many suffer the fear of change "when peace of mind would be challenged." I think the trick is to make a decision and stick with it, choose the right road and proceed with as much confidence as possible. The riddle might surround the nature of what lies ahead and it might turn out to be pure adventure. No guarantees, but I love this Jade.
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10th Jul 2016 3:38am
Thank you so much, dear crowfly, your embrace and your share mean a lot. I believe much of what you say about how a major change can often lead to an adventure in many cases. The thing is to try. Without that, you'll never really know.
With graditude, my new friend--
ever
Jade🎏
With graditude, my new friend--
ever
Jade🎏
Re. Riddle
9th Jul 2016 7:31pm
This is a great work in both style and deed - classic
There's no guarantee the direction is true,
The final step comes after many.
There's no guarantee the direction is true,
The final step comes after many.
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10th Jul 2016 3:49am
Dear whale! How good it is to have children me by, to share your thoughts, and you're support... with my graditude!
my esteem,
always
Jade🎏
my esteem,
always
Jade🎏
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14th Jul 2016 1:22am
Jade, you've illustrated well the uncertainty of risk and the necessity of the same. Brava bella poeta!
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15th Jul 2016 7:06am
*gently nods her head forward*
Exactly, dear one, thank you! For how much would anyone accomplish without that "push"?
Exactly, dear one, thank you! For how much would anyone accomplish without that "push"?
Re. Riddle
15th Jul 2016 1:43pm
Hey Jadey.. you've said well here by saying everything but in words....
Timing....not rhyming is everything... if only us humans knew the timing... very well put Jadey!
Timing....not rhyming is everything... if only us humans knew the timing... very well put Jadey!
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15th Jul 2016 1:59pm
Thank you most kindly, my endless friend, for words that don't need to be precisely counted, and sharing your thoughts here with me. I'm endearingly pleased.
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26th Jul 2016 7:56pm